Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir/Madam, First of all, I would like to inform you that we have an upcoming event at your hotel. Our company has several games, singing contests,and much more.The company event is estimated to have more than 100 attenders,so we hope that you will provide your best dishes. The reason why we are choosing your hotel for our event is that we like the ambiance of the place, the area is best for our attendees, and the lights and the stage are very comfortable for speaking. In addition, we have several comments for some improvements to the place.First, the stage lights: we hope you add some details and add some tables, maybe five more; also, the chair to accommodate more visitors. I hope that you make some changes to the place that we mentioned.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover the three requested points: you describe a company event with games and singing contests, explain that you like the hotel’s ambience, location, lighting and stage, and suggest improvements. However, the event details are brief, and the request for “your best dishes” does not clearly specify catering arrangements or preferences. The improvement suggestions—more stage-light details, five additional tables and more chairs—are also not fully clear or explained. The response is 16 words below the required minimum, so it needs further development as well as more precise requests. Add practical details such as the event date, schedule, seating needs and specific changes you would like the hotel to make.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The ideas follow a generally sensible order: event information, reasons for choosing the hotel, and suggestions for improvement. Linking phrases such as “First of all” and “In addition” help signal these stages. However, the response is presented as one continuous block rather than clearly separated paragraphs, and some connections are mechanical. The sentence beginning “First, the stage lights” then moves to tables and chairs, making the relationship between the suggestions less clear. Use a separate paragraph for each purpose and organise the improvement requests into a clear list or connected sentences. A closing sentence is present, but a more conventional sign-off would make the letter feel complete.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the situation, including “company event,” “attendees,” “ambiance,” “stage” and “improvements,” so the main message is understandable. However, the range is limited and some choices are imprecise or unnatural: “attenders” is not the usual term for people at an event, “the area is best” is vague, and “add some details” does not explain what change is wanted. “The chair” also does not clearly express the need for additional seating. Choose more precise hotel and event vocabulary, and specify the requested facilities. This would make the letter more professional and help the manager understand exactly what you value and what you want changed.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt some longer sentence forms, including “The reason why we are choosing your hotel … is that …,” and the reader can follow the main message. However, control is uneven, particularly in the improvement sentence: “we hope you add some details and add some tables …; also, the chair to accommodate more visitors” is not a complete, well-formed construction. There are also punctuation and spacing problems, such as missing spaces after commas in “contests,and” and “attenders,so.” The opening says “we have an upcoming event,” but the letter does not provide a date or other details to clarify the timing. Use complete sentences for each request and check punctuation and sentence boundaries carefully.

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