Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to provide feedback about the organisation of an event at your hotel.

Last week, a production management seminar was held at your hotel on Thursday and Friday. As this event has particulartly focussed on developement of a company. Owing to this, it was attended by almost 500 people.

The best part of the management was the sound system, which makes the whole programme outstanding since the voice of the speaker was audible even at the last seat. Furthermore, The service provided by the team members was also up to the mark.

However, I would like to make suggestions for improvement of certain areas such as the WiFi system was not working properly that had caused a lot of inconvience to all members of our company. Moreover, the air conditioner in the hall was making little noise which had made the audio unclear at some areas.

Thank you so much for helping to make our event memorable. I hope you will consider my recommendations.

Yours sincerely,

Deep Kaur.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three requirements: it identifies the event as a production management seminar held over two days, describes positive features of the sound system and staff service, and gives two practical suggestions concerning Wi-Fi and air conditioning. The purpose and polite, appreciative tone remain clear throughout. The details about the event and the problems are relevant, and the examples explain why the facilities mattered to attendees. To make the response more fully developed, clarify the seminar’s purpose and give a little more specific context for the improvements—for example, how the Wi-Fi affected the event or what action you would like the hotel to take. Overall, the task is covered clearly, though some points could be extended further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The information follows a clear, useful sequence: the opening states the purpose, the next paragraph describes the event, and the following paragraphs present strengths and areas for improvement before a courteous closing. This makes the letter easy to follow, and transitions such as “Furthermore” and “However” help signal the relationship between ideas. Paragraphing is appropriate for the different functions of the letter. Some linking is slightly mechanical, and the sentence beginning “As this event…” is not smoothly connected to the preceding detail, interrupting the flow. The capitalisation of “The” after “Furthermore” also distracts slightly. More natural links between the event’s purpose, attendance, and feedback would make the progression even more fluent.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for a formal feedback letter, with relevant terms such as “production management seminar,” “sound system,” “audible,” and “inconvenience.” The writer also attempts more formal expressions, including “provide feedback” and “consider my recommendations.” However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural: “the best part of the management” does not clearly describe the hotel’s facilities, and “up to the mark” is less suitable in this formal context. Spelling errors in “particularly,” “development,” and “inconvenience” also show that written vocabulary is not yet consistently controlled. Choose precise terms for the hotel’s service and facilities, and check spelling carefully to improve accuracy and naturalness.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The letter includes both simple statements and attempts at more complex structures, such as “which makes the whole programme outstanding” and the clause explaining the air conditioner’s effect on the audio. Meaning is generally clear, and the paragraphs are built from complete sentences. Some grammatical errors remain, however. “As this event has particularly focused…” is a dependent clause presented as a sentence, while “the WiFi system was not working properly that had caused…” combines clauses incorrectly. There is also a tense inconsistency in “which makes” after describing a past event, and “the air conditioner…was making little noise which had made…” has an unclear relationship between tenses. Use complete clauses and keep past-tense reporting consistent; this will make the complex sentences more accurate.

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