Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir / Madam,

I hope you are doing well,

I am writing to give a feedback about the services you rendered during an event at your hotel. In August 2026, my company organized an event related to marketting. I assisted my company to do setup at the venue. During the event, I observed number of good services and discrepancies.

I would like to say thank to all your porter team members, who helped us to make this event successful. Especially, some of the team members who came early in the morning and helped us to set up the coffee stations. In addition to this, janitorial team also played a significant role to make the area neat and clean.

However, there were some issues which caused inconvenience. Firstly, the quality of the sound system was very poor. Which put bad impact on all the guests. Furthermore, the lightening in the room was quiet dull. Due to that reason, it was difficult for guests to read the meal menu.

Overall it was a great experinece with your hotel. However, if you could improve the sound quality and fix the lights in the room that would be a great thing. which will further foster us to consider your hotel for our next event in June 2027.

I hope you would pay immediate attention to all details.

Yours sincerely.

Manjit Kumar

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three requirements: it identifies a company marketing event in August 2026, praises the porter and janitorial teams, and asks for improvements to the sound system and lighting. The positive comments are supported with specific examples, such as staff arriving early to set up coffee stations. The problems are also clearly linked to their effects on guests, including difficulty reading the menu. The closing reference to a possible June 2027 event gives the feedback a clear purpose. To make the response more fully developed, explain the event’s nature or scale a little more and specify what change would improve the sound system. The overall message and intended request remain clear and appropriate for a hotel manager.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter follows a clear progression: it introduces the event, describes positive service, raises problems, and ends with a future-facing request. Paragraphing helps distinguish these functions, and linking expressions such as “In addition to this,” “However,” and “Furthermore” guide the reader through the points. The sequence is easy to follow, and the final reference to a future booking connects the suggestions to a practical outcome. Some transitions are slightly mechanical, and the opening paragraph combines background with a general comment about “good services and discrepancies” before the details are presented. A more direct transition into the feedback, and clearer links between the lighting problem and the requested action, would make the cohesion more flexible and polished.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The response uses an adequate range of vocabulary for a formal complaint and appreciation letter, including “significant role,” “caused inconvenience,” and “pay immediate attention.” These choices communicate the main points, and the writer attempts some less common expressions. However, several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “give a feedback,” “do setup,” and “put bad impact.” There are also spelling errors, including “marketting,” “lightening,” “experinece,” and “quiet” where “quite” is intended. These do not prevent understanding, but they reduce precision and control. Aim for natural combinations such as “provide feedback,” “set up the venue,” and “had a negative impact,” and proofread carefully for spelling.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

There is a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including relative clauses (“team members, who helped us”) and conditional phrasing (“if you could improve…”). The main message is generally understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “I hope you are doing well,” is punctuated as a comma splice with the next sentence, and “Which put bad impact…” is an incomplete sentence because it is separated from the preceding clause. Articles and sentence construction also need attention in “observed number of good services” and “I would like to say thank.” The final request beginning “which will further foster…” is another fragment. Use complete clauses, check article use, and connect dependent clauses to the sentences they belong to; this would improve accuracy while preserving the range of structures attempted.

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