Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Sir/ Madam,

Last weekend, the employees of BWXT Canada gathered together at your hotel for the annual retreat. This year I had the opportunity to be part of the organising team and it was a decent experience.

The banquet hall welcomed 355 employees and the evening kicked off with a musical karaoke competition featuring drinks and later barbeque. Noticeable employees were honoured with prizes for their extraordinary contribution. I enjoyed the cleanliness, seating arrangement and the quality of food which was served by patient hosts.

In addition to above mentioned ambience, I would like to address the limited number of parking spots being offered. I would have highly appreciated if additional parking spots were made available for a gathering as big as it was mentioned prior to booking. This would have not led to the parking chaos each one of us faced on that day. Overall it was a satisfactory experience, I look forward for next year's retreat at your hotel.

Yours sincerely,

Ranbir

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three requirements: it identifies the company retreat, describes activities and attendance, praises the hotel’s cleanliness, seating and food, and raises the parking shortage with a clear request for improvement. The complaint is supported by the effect on guests (“the parking chaos each one of us faced”), and the overall tone remains courteous. These details give the reader a clear account of the event and your experience. To make the response more fully developed, explain a little more about how the parking problem affected the event or specify a practical remedy, such as reserving extra spaces. The positive comments could also be made more specific, for example by describing what made the food or service particularly good.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The information follows a clear progression: the opening establishes the event, the next section describes it and highlights positive features, and the final section introduces the concern before closing politely. Paragraphing supports this sequence, and links such as “In addition” and “Overall” help guide the reader. The letter is easy to follow throughout. Some connections are less smooth, however: “In addition to above mentioned ambience” is an awkward transition, and the shift from the event description to the hotel’s positive features could be clearer. Use more natural linking phrases and ensure each paragraph has a distinct focus. The closing sentence also combines a general evaluation with a future expectation, so separating these ideas would improve the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use a suitable range of vocabulary for a formal complaint and appreciation letter, including “annual retreat,” “extraordinary contribution,” “limited number of parking spots” and “parking chaos.” These choices communicate the event and the problem clearly, and there is some attempt to use less common language. A few expressions are imprecise or unnatural in context, which keeps the vocabulary from sounding consistently flexible and idiomatic. For example, “Noticeable employees” does not naturally mean employees who deserve recognition, and “patient hosts” may not convey the service quality you intend. “Decent experience” is also rather general. Choose collocations that express your meaning precisely, and favour specific descriptions over broad evaluative words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

The letter includes a mix of simple and more developed sentence forms, and most of the meaning remains clear. For instance, the sentence beginning “I would have highly appreciated if…” attempts a conditional structure, while the final section uses a relative clause in “which was served by patient hosts.” Some grammatical errors and awkward constructions remain. In “I would have highly appreciated if,” the clause needs “it” after “appreciated”; “In addition to above mentioned ambience” needs an article or possessive before the phrase; and “I look forward for next year’s retreat” uses the wrong preposition and would be more accurate as “look forward to.” The final sentence also joins two independent clauses with only a comma. Correcting these patterns would improve accuracy while retaining your sentence variety.

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