Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

p- general review

d- specific review - centrally located, kind staff,

s- lighting and setup of conference hall

Dear Sir/Madam,

I hope you are doing well. I am the human resource manager of Delloite Inc. and Recently I organized an event for my organization in your hotel. Our organization was celebrating its 50 year anniversary of the Toronto office and we had booked the entire floor of your hotel to accomodate all of our guests.

Your hotel is located in the heart of downtown which makes it convinient for everyone to attend. What I liked about the hotel was how kind and welcoming your staff were. It made our guests feel welcomed. I also liked the food which was served, especially fresh juice as the welcome drink.

Even though it was a wonderful event, one thing I would like to mention is the lightings a

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You provide relevant details about the occasion: your company’s Toronto office was celebrating its 50th anniversary, and the hotel hosted the guests. You also identify positive features, including the central location, welcoming staff and fresh juice. However, the response is incomplete: the final sentence breaks off at “the lightings a”, so the requested improvement to the conference hall’s lighting or setup is not explained. The event details and praise are also brief rather than fully developed. In addition, the response is 5 words below the required minimum. To address the task more fully, complete the suggestion, explain its effect on the event, and add a suitable closing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The letter follows a generally understandable order: it introduces the event, describes what you appreciated, and begins to raise an area for improvement. This gives the reader a basic progression, and linking phrases such as “Even though” help signal a shift. However, the opening notes “p- general review” and “d- specific review” are planning fragments that do not belong in the finished letter. The final sentence is also cut off, leaving the last point and the overall ending unclear. Use clear paragraphs for the event, positive feedback and suggestions, and finish with a complete closing so the organisation feels complete rather than interrupted.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is adequate for the purpose and includes relevant expressions such as “centrally located,” “welcoming,” “accommodate” and “welcome drink.” These help convey the event and your positive impressions. Some spelling and word-choice errors reduce accuracy, including “Delloite,” “convinient,” and “lightings”; “lighting” is normally uncountable in this context. “Kind” and “wonderful” communicate your meaning but are quite general, so more precise descriptions would make the feedback more informative. Aim to check spelling carefully and choose specific terms for the venue, service and facilities. The unfinished phrase at the end also prevents the reader from understanding the improvement you intended to describe.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more developed sentence forms, and most of the message is understandable. For example, “Your hotel is located in the heart of downtown which makes…” combines related ideas, while “It made our guests feel welcomed” is a clear simple sentence. Some grammatical and punctuation issues remain. The relative clause in “downtown which makes” would be clearer with a comma before “which,” and “Recently” should not be capitalised mid-sentence. The final sentence, “one thing I would like to mention is the lightings a,” is incomplete, so its grammatical structure cannot be followed. Proofread sentence boundaries and ensure each sentence has a complete ending.

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