Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Madam

im writing a letter regarding an event which organised by my company in your hotel and it took place last week .it went fantastic and everything were very organised and well maintained.

furthermore,staff were very supportive and experinced .area was very spacious and food were delecious .we all enjoyed it and its made unfogetable moment for us but there are some area which need litte bit improvement and need to adding some new things in it for example sitting area should be more wided with more tables and chairs and stage also should be more wide so that individuals can use it without any rush during tge party and there should be a saprate place for clicking pictures with new modren decorations things such as chair,swings or any victory statue so that users click there picture during events and keep it as a unforgetabe memories for whole life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the main points by describing the company event, praising the staff, space and food, and suggesting improvements to the seating, stage and photo area. These details are relevant, but the event itself is only briefly identified as having taken place last week; adding its purpose, size or type would make the account more complete. Your positive comments are clear, while the improvement suggestions are more developed, though some are difficult to interpret precisely. The letter also needs a clearer closing and a more consistently appropriate formal tone. To strengthen the response, organise each requested point clearly and explain how the proposed changes would improve guests’ experience.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The ideas follow a broadly sensible order: you introduce the event, describe what worked well, and then move to suggestions. Linking expressions such as “furthermore” and “but” help signal these shifts. However, nearly the entire letter is presented as one long paragraph, and the final sentence combines several separate recommendations, making the progression difficult to follow. Some connections are also unclear, particularly where praise for the event runs directly into the request for improvements. Use separate paragraphs for the event, positive features and suggestions, and divide the recommendations into shorter sentences. This would make the organisation clearer and reduce the need for the reader to work out how each idea relates to the next.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a range of vocabulary relevant to a hotel event, including “supportive,” “spacious,” “stage,” “decorations” and “memories.” This gives you enough language to communicate both praise and practical suggestions. However, spelling and word-choice errors are frequent enough to make parts of the letter less clear, as in “experinced,” “delecious,” “unfogetable” and “wided.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “new modren decorations things” and “click there picture.” Choose more natural collocations and check spelling carefully. For example, describe a “separate photo area with modern decorations” and say that guests can “take pictures” there. More precise wording would make your suggestions easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, including the sentence beginning “but there are some area,” but these extended structures are often faulty and make the message harder to follow. There are frequent problems with verb forms and agreement: “which organised” needs a passive form, “everything were” should agree with the singular subject, and “food were” also has incorrect agreement. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are inconsistent, with several ideas joined together without full stops. There is some evidence of more than simple sentence patterns, but control is limited. Build accuracy first with shorter sentences, then combine related ideas using correctly formed clauses and check subject–verb agreement and punctuation.

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