Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to share my feedback on the recent event held at your hotel of my company. The event took place last friday evening in basement lounge of your hotel. It was our office quarter meeting where we discuss about our achievements and future goals.

I must say everyone likes the ambience of your hotel and prompt services from your management team. Furthermore, meeting hall has appropriate seating arrangements to accommodate maximum attendees along with buffet area.

In addition, sound quality was a perk over everything.

I appreciate your hosting and spontaneous collaboration with your staff members but still there are few things which could be improved for better. Firstly, cleanliness in washroom and changing room is not appropriate and lastly, food that was served was not that much hot.

I hope you will take these suggestion in a positive way and take prompt action to avoid in future bookings.

Yours sincerely,

Rahul Kumar

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points: you identify the event as an office quarterly meeting, describe positive features such as the ambience, service, seating and sound, and suggest improvements to the washrooms and food temperature. This covers the task clearly and gives the manager relevant feedback. The event details and praise are more specific than the improvement suggestions, however: the problems are named but not explained with examples or their effect on attendees. The opening also says “at your hotel of my company,” which makes the relationship between the company and the event slightly unclear. To strengthen the letter further, clarify the event context and briefly explain why the suggested changes matter, while maintaining the polite tone.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter follows a clear progression from its purpose and event details to positive comments, then to suggestions and a closing. Paragraphing helps distinguish these functions, and linking expressions such as “Furthermore,” “In addition,” and “Firstly” guide the reader through the points. The sequence is easy to follow overall. Some connections feel mechanical or imprecise, though: “In addition” introduces a very short standalone sentence, while “Firstly” is followed by “lastly” within the same sentence. Grouping the praise into a more connected paragraph and presenting the two improvements in parallel sentences would make cohesion more flexible. The final sentence also combines appreciation, criticism and a request, so separating these ideas would give the ending a clearer progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for a formal feedback letter, including “ambience,” “prompt services,” “seating arrangements,” and “achievements and future goals.” These choices communicate the main points, and the reader can understand the concerns. Some collocations and word choices are less natural or precise, however. “Spontaneous collaboration” does not clearly express the staff’s helpful cooperation, and “a perk over everything” is an awkward way to emphasise the sound quality. “Not that much hot” is also imprecise. Aim for conventional, specific expressions for service, facilities and food temperature. More accurate collocations would make the letter sound more fluent and professional without requiring unnecessarily complex vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including the sentence beginning “I appreciate your hosting … but still there are few things,” and most grammatical issues do not prevent the reader from understanding your message. Some errors remain in verb forms, articles, agreement and sentence construction. For example, “last friday” should use a capital letter for the day, and “where we discuss” needs a past-tense verb to match the event. In “everyone likes,” the past context calls for a past form; “there are few things” also needs an article. The final sentence has an unclear construction around “take these suggestion … and take prompt action.” Review tense consistency and article and plural forms, then divide longer sentences where needed.

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