Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to provide you feedback about an event we recently organised at your hotel for our company's anniversary

We held an event at your hotel on 24th October Tuesday. Almost 400 guests were present in the event and also a special stage was set up for this event so members who wanted to give a speech can use that stage.

I want to inform you about what I liked the most. The hospitality of your hotel staff was definitely impressive. They did greet and welcomed all of the guests with respect and with a smiling face. Additionally, the food was really delicious and everyone complemented the taste your chef provided.

But there are some concerns I believe should be addressed. The music that was playing in the background was really loud which was making difficult for the guests to communicate with each other. So I would suggest if the sound of the music should be set up at a reasonable volume.

Thank you for the arrangements. Looking forward to organise more events at your hotel.

Yours sincerely,

ABC

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You address all three requested points: the anniversary event is described, the staff and food are praised, and the loud background music is identified as an area for improvement. Details such as the date, approximate attendance and provision of a stage make the account relevant, while the suggestion to lower the volume gives the manager a practical response. The positive comments are supported with examples, including the staff greeting guests and the food being enjoyed. To make the letter more fully developed, explain a little more about the event’s purpose or how the music affected the occasion, and specify a clearer improvement, such as checking sound levels during future events. The purpose and tone remain clear throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter follows a clear, logical sequence: it introduces the reason for writing, describes the event, gives positive feedback, raises a concern and closes politely. Paragraphing helps the reader distinguish these functions, and transitions such as “Additionally” and “But” signal the relationship between ideas. The progression is easy to follow overall. Some linking is a little mechanical, however, particularly the repeated use of “I” to introduce points (“I am writing” and “I want to inform you”). The final thanks and future-looking sentence also move quickly from the complaint to the closing. A smoother transition that briefly balances the concern with the overall positive experience would make the connections feel more flexible.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is adequate for the purpose and includes relevant terms such as “anniversary,” “hospitality,” “arrangements” and “reasonable volume.” These choices communicate the event details and feedback clearly, and the reader can understand your meaning throughout. However, some word combinations are inaccurate or unnatural, including “provide you feedback,” “present in the event,” and “complemented the taste your chef provided.” “Set up” is also repeated for the stage and the music volume, and “really” is used more than once. Aim for more precise collocations and a slightly wider range of evaluative language—for example, describe the staff’s service as attentive or the food as well prepared. This would improve naturalness and flexibility.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including the relative clause “which was making difficult for the guests to communicate with each other.” Most ideas remain understandable, and the event details are conveyed clearly. Some grammatical errors persist, however. In that clause, the structure needs an object (“making it difficult”), and “guests” would normally take “at” rather than “in” in “present in the event.” The sentence about the staff also has a tense/form problem: “did greet and welcomed” should use parallel verb forms, such as “greeted and welcomed.” In the closing, “Looking forward to organise” needs a gerund or an infinitive construction. Review verb patterns, articles and prepositions, while continuing to practise varied sentence structures.

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