Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that old buildings, such as town halls and art galleries, should be restored, even though this can be costly. Others argue that governments should replace them with new, modern buildings.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Although it is indubitable that tall buildings and a modern infrastructures have become neccesity in this increasingly populating world, community halls and art gallaries should be preserved and not be replaced as they demonstrate the cultural values that have been preserved for ages. This essay intend to analyse both views surrounded my opinion.

On the one hand, a significant increase in numbers of people migrating to urban cities for seeking better job opportunities or to attend higher education universities requires more developed infrastructure in order to accomodate them. For example, tall buildings can provide habitates for many families while occupying a little piece of land. Similarly a big commercial complexes allow many people to run the business. Despite the fact that modernisation helps people improve a standard of living and a qulity of lives, it can not take a place of long preserved cultural places.

On the other hand, people from all across geographical boundaries may willing to unwind themselves in this fast-paced and stressfull work environment. Community halls enable local residents to celebrate events such as family gathering, wedding ceremonies, and festive celebrations, encouraging people to have a sense of belonging where they can express their emotions to their loved ones or even strangers. Art gallaries, that hold a beultiful paintings and sculptures which had been made after a lot of hardwork and perspiration should also be valued, they may discourage people from interest in arts otherwise.

In conclusion, taking all factors into account, I strongly believe that some places like town halls and art gallaries should not be replaced at expense of building modern buildings, although urbanisation is equally important in this quickly populating cities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both sides of the discussion and state a clear preference for preserving town halls and art galleries. The point that modern buildings can house many families on limited land gives a relevant reason for replacement, while the examples of community celebrations and artworks explain the cultural and social value of older buildings. However, the case for replacing old buildings is developed more fully as a general argument for urban infrastructure than as a direct comparison with costly restoration. Your claim that galleries may discourage people from losing interest in art is also unclear and needs explanation. To strengthen the response, discuss the cost and practical trade-offs explicitly, then support your position with a more specific example of how restoration benefits a community.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion that restates your position. The signposts “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” make the progression easy to follow, and the examples generally sit in the relevant paragraphs. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent organisation and shows some of the clearer progression associated with a stronger performance. However, some links between ideas are mechanical, and a few references are difficult to follow. For instance, “they may discourage people from interest in arts otherwise” does not clearly connect the artworks to the intended effect. Use more precise referencing and explain the relationship between each example and your main point.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for the topic, including phrases such as “cultural values,” “sense of belonging,” “fast-paced,” and “urbanisation.” These choices help communicate both the practical and cultural arguments, and you attempt some less common vocabulary. However, inaccurate spelling and word choice sometimes reduce precision: “neccesity,” “gallaries,” and “beultiful” are misspelled, while “habitates” and “a big commercial complexes” are not natural forms. “Tall buildings” also does not precisely express the broader idea of modern infrastructure. Check spelling carefully and learn common collocations as complete phrases, such as “accommodate residents” and “commercial complexes.” More accurate, natural wording would make your ideas clearer and more convincing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex structures, including a concession in “Despite the fact that modernisation helps…” and a relative clause describing the artworks. Most of the argument remains understandable, but some grammatical errors occur across sentence patterns. For example, “This essay intend” needs subject–verb agreement, and “people … may willing” is missing “be.” There are also problems with articles and number in “a big commercial complexes,” and the final sentence has an awkward comparison structure in “should not be replaced at expense of building modern buildings.” Aim to make each sentence’s subject and verb clear, check singular and plural forms, and use articles consistently. Revising these patterns will improve accuracy while retaining your complex sentences.

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