Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that old buildings, such as town halls and art galleries, should be restored, even though this can be costly. Others argue that governments should replace them with new, modern buildings.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

In this contemporary world, buildings are playing very crucial role to make cities look beautiful. There is an ongoing debate between two groups of people whether to spend a huge amount of money to renovate heritage structures such as architectural museums and town halls or an advanced buildings should take place of old structures. Both the views are discussed further before giving my viewpoint.

On the one hand, supporters of the former view claim that even though it is costly, historic buildings should be renovated. Because they believe that it leads to the allure of tourism. To elaborate, the public can have the urge to experience old-fashioned materialistic things such as clothes, instruments and tools alongside taking photographs as a memory over there. For instance, a case in point is The Royal Museum in India, which attracts almost 50,000 tourists every month. Therefore, a great profit can be made; individuals can learn their history and get tied to their roots by having a great visit in these places.

On the other hand, the opponents argue with the claim that it is crucial to stay up-to-date with this contemporary world's need. To describe, the new buildings are built in the way that is the requirement of today, such as heat-resistance ones and air-conditioning is also available, and even in limited land availability, concerning the need of the growing population. For example, in Canada, 20-30 floor buildings are becoming popular and earlier ones are depleting as the population is increasingly enormously.

Thus, the problem of house shortage will not occur. and people can be satisfied.

To recapitulate and offer my position, although the ancient monuments are beneficial, the modern ones are equally significant. I think that accommodating people in modern houses with a well-built style is necessary to avoid chaotic environments due to limited housing, along with educating them with historic knowledge by having a visit to old museums.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses all parts of the prompt by discussing both viewpoints and providing a clear personal opinion. The ideas are relevant, such as the economic benefits of tourism for heritage sites and the practical necessity of modern housing for growing populations. However, the development is somewhat uneven. The argument for modern buildings is slightly more convincing than the heritage side, which relies on a somewhat vague example of 'materialistic things'. To reach a higher band, ensure that the supporting examples are more analytical rather than descriptive. The position is consistent throughout the essay, and the conclusion effectively synthesizes the two perspectives.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the two opposing views. Cohesive devices such as 'On the one hand', 'On the other hand', and 'To recapitulate' are used to guide the reader through the argument. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and there are minor issues with punctuation, such as the sentence fragment 'and people can be satisfied' following a period. Referencing is generally clear, but the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking phrases to connect ideas more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, with some attempts at less common items like 'contemporary', 'heritage structures', and 'depleting'. However, there are instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'old-fashioned materialistic things' and 'an advanced buildings should take place of old structures'. These errors do not impede communication but prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. The range is sufficient to convey the intended meaning, but more precise academic vocabulary would enhance the quality of the argument.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While there is an attempt at complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'buildings are playing very crucial role' (missing article), 'an advanced buildings' (plural/article mismatch), and 'population is increasingly enormously' (incorrect adverb usage). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the placement of periods and commas. Despite these errors, the meaning remains clear throughout the text. To improve, the student should focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles.

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