Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that old buildings, such as town halls and art galleries, should be restored, even though this can be costly. Others argue that governments should replace them with new, modern buildings.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

In this contemporary world, buildings are playing very crucial role to make cities look beautiful. There is an ongoing debate between two groups of people whether to spend a huge amount of money to renovate heritage structures such as architectural museums and town halls or an advanced buildings should take place of old structures. Both the views are discussed further before giving my viewpoint.

On the one hand, supporters of the former view claim that even though it is costly, historic buildings should be renovated. Because they believe that it leads to the allure of tourism. To elaborate, the public can have the urge to experience old-fashioned materialistic things such as clothes, instruments and tools alongside taking photographs as a memory over there. For instance, a case in point is The Royal Museum in India, which attracts almost 50,000 tourists every month. Therefore, a great profit can be made; individuals can learn their history and get tied to their roots by having a great visit in these places.

On the other hand, the opponents argue with the claim that it is crucial to stay up-to-date with this contemporary world's need. To describe, the new buildings are built in the way that is the requirement of today, such as heat-resistance ones and air-conditioning is also available, and even in limited land availability, concerning the need of the growing population. For example, in Canada, 20-30 floor buildings are becoming popular and earlier ones are depleting as the population is increasing enormously.

Thus, the problem of house shortage will not occur and people can be satisfied.

To recapitulate and offer my position, although the ancient monuments are beneficial, the modern ones are equally significant. I think that accommodating people in modern houses with a well-built style is necessary to avoid chaotic environments due to limited housing, along with educating them with historic knowledge by having a visit to old museums.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion in the conclusion. The ideas are relevant, such as the economic benefits of tourism for heritage sites and the practical necessity of modern housing for growing populations. However, some points are slightly under-developed; for instance, the explanation of 'heat-resistance' and 'air-conditioning' as reasons for replacing old buildings is a bit simplistic. To reach a higher band, ensure that the supporting arguments are more thoroughly explored and linked more explicitly to the prompt's core tension between preservation and modernization.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the two opposing views. Cohesive devices such as 'On the one hand', 'On the other hand', and 'To recapitulate' are used to guide the reader. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'the opponents argue with the claim that it is crucial', which is slightly awkward. Overall, the progression of ideas is clear and easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, with some attempts at more sophisticated language like 'contemporary world', 'heritage structures', and 'enormously'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'old-fashioned materialistic things' and 'the allure of tourism' (which is slightly misused). There is also a tendency to use repetitive phrasing. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and avoiding wordy, unnatural expressions. The range is sufficient to communicate ideas clearly, but lacks the flexibility and precision required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('the allure of tourism', 'the requirement of today') and subject-verb agreement ('an advanced buildings should take place'). Some sentences are slightly disjointed, such as 'Because they believe that it leads to the allure of tourism', which is a sentence fragment. While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Increasing the variety of error-free complex structures would be beneficial.

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