Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that old buildings, such as town halls and art galleries, should be restored, even though this can be costly. Others argue that governments should replace them with new, modern buildings.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is generally perceived by a significant proportion of individuals that old buildings should be restored while others believe that these buildings should be replaced with new buildings of modern architecture. The following essay will discuss the restoration of ancient buildings in contrast to the renovation of new modern buildings is given.

Some people believe in this logical idea that old buildings such as towns, halls, art galleries , forts, mosques and museums should be restored by the government of the particular area as it captures the cultural, historical and architectural heritage of a particular region.These buildings not only show the cultural identity of that region but attraction towards the tourism also elevates. For instance, Tokyo and Seoul ancient palaces and castles were restored by the local government of the area by allocating some money for it . In this way, this crucial step will increase tourism in these areas to explore their exotic culture.

In contrast, some people have a strong belief in the replacement of these old buildings to new and modern architecture.Such as making new housing societies to adjust a significant proportion of individuals in the area to resolve housing crises. A salient example for this point is that, in Singapore affordable housing schemes were established to improve the living quality of the citizens. So, that they can maintain high living standards along with motivation in work.

In my opinion these buildings should be replaced to have new housing and traveling road facilities.

We can conclude that although old buildings are our heritage but these can be replaced to accelerate the wellbeing.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The essay addresses all parts of the prompt by discussing both views and providing an opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you provide examples like Tokyo and Singapore, the explanation of why these buildings should be replaced is underdeveloped, relying on brief mentions of housing and roads. Your position is clear in the conclusion, but it appears somewhat abruptly as it was not fully integrated into the body paragraphs. To reach a higher band, ensure that your opinion is woven throughout the essay and that your supporting arguments are explored in greater depth with more detailed reasoning.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices such as 'In contrast', 'For instance', and 'In my opinion' to link your thoughts. However, some transitions are a bit mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the final sentence where 'these' refers back to old buildings in a way that feels slightly repetitive. The paragraphing is appropriate, but the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each sentence builds logically upon the previous one.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'architectural heritage', 'exotic culture', and 'salient example'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'attraction towards the tourism also elevates' and 'traveling road facilities', which sound unnatural. While your vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, you need to use less common lexical items with more precision and better awareness of natural collocations to move into the higher bands. Spelling is generally accurate, but the range of vocabulary remains somewhat limited.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'Tokyo and Seoul ancient palaces' (missing possessive 's'), 'the restoration of ancient buildings in contrast to the renovation of new modern buildings is given' (awkward passive construction), and 'So, that they can' (incorrect punctuation). While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. To improve, focus on mastering subject-verb agreement, correct preposition usage, and ensuring that your complex sentences are constructed accurately without unnecessary punctuation.

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