Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that old buildings, such as town halls and art galleries, should be restored, even though this can be costly. Others argue that governments should replace them with new, modern buildings.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
A large number of individuals prefer to live with their old and ancient memories and passion, like art, library etc. Even these passions are expensive some time However, some people are not giving them as many values. because they though authorities should convert them into aesthetic place.
On the one hand, ancient building and old places has a lot of memories. Our ancestors have spent a lot of time in these kinds of places. in addition, these building have a lot of stock also some people ask to the government to restock theses building because these are helping a lot a local citizen. Therefore, it is expensive process, but government have to do it because of citizen.
One the other hand, new generation would like theses building convert them into new cozy buildings. Art gallery, library and music studio are involved in it. It has two side some are positive aspects and others are negative. in addition, if authorities would replace them into other modern building it takes a lot of money paraphs it may cause disturb the government budget.
Meanwhile, If government giving the freedom of choice to their citizen and replace the building into new one it will increase the beauty of city
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you attempt to discuss both views, the arguments are underdeveloped and lack specific examples or logical depth. The position is somewhat unclear, and the conclusion is abrupt. To improve, you must expand on your reasoning for each perspective and ensure you provide a clear, consistent opinion throughout the essay. The current length prevents a full exploration of the topic, leading to a score in the lower range.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. While you use some transition signals like 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand', the internal flow of ideas within paragraphs is often disjointed. For example, the transition between discussing the value of old buildings and the cost of restoration is abrupt. Additionally, referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow your argument. Improving the use of cohesive devices and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus will help improve the overall structure.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'old', 'new', and 'place', which restricts your ability to express complex ideas precisely. There are also several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'restock these building' instead of 'restore these buildings' and 'aesthetic place' used incorrectly. To achieve a higher band, you should aim to incorporate a wider range of topic-specific vocabulary related to architecture, urban planning, and heritage conservation, and focus on using words in their correct collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'ancient building... has', 'government have to do it'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper punctuation, which affects readability. You rely primarily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences often contain errors in tense or word order. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement and pluralisation would be a good starting point for improvement.
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