Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that old buildings, such as town halls and art galleries, should be restored, even though this can be costly. Others argue that governments should replace them with new, modern buildings.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

A group of people believes that heritage buildings and old town halls and art galleries, should be renovated and restored, although it can be expensive. While others believe that those should be replaced by updated and new buildings. I believe there are numerous merits and demerits of phenomena, which I will explain below with my opinion.

on one side, historic sculptures such as old building, town halls and art galleries are the heritage of old times, they are heart of the city. Restoring them could be costly due to the demand of expensive labour, expertise experts and raw material it requires, although. the benefits to forward it to the next generations is invaluable. Additionally, these buildings does not only attract the tourism but also provides a disposable income and employment opportunities for the local public. It can support the expenses of renovation as well as improve the facilities for tourists in the city. Moreover, more tourists means more jobs and less migration of locals.

On the other side, many people believe that there should be all new modern constructed buildings for art exhibitions and events. As old building has a risk of falling down might leads to injuries or death, while it vanishes in the modern architecture. Furthermore, new buildings gets new look, advanced amenities such as air conditioning, heater, projections and computers. This creates more demand among young age artists and tourists.

In conclusion, there are plenty of benefits building new structures attracting youth and artists, In my opinion, these phenomena out-weights restoring the old historic heritage to pass on to the future generations and earning additional revenue for the development of city advantages over new buildings

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both views and provides an opinion, though the conclusion is somewhat confusingly phrased. You identify the merits of restoration and the benefits of modern construction. However, the development of ideas is slightly uneven; for example, the argument regarding 'disposable income' is a bit vague. Your position is stated in the introduction and conclusion, but the final sentence is grammatically disjointed, making your ultimate stance difficult to follow clearly. To improve, ensure your position is consistently maintained and clearly articulated throughout the essay, and provide more specific, logical links between your arguments and the topic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'On one side', 'Additionally', and 'In conclusion'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as the placement of 'although' at the end of a sentence. Furthermore, the referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly in the conclusion where the sentence structure breaks down, making the logical flow between your opinion and the supporting points difficult to track. Improving the variety and precision of your linking words will help your ideas flow more naturally.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'renovated', 'heritage', 'invaluable', and 'amenities'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'expertise experts' (redundant) and 'young age artists' (unnatural). There are also minor errors in word formation, such as 'out-weights' instead of 'outweighs'. While these errors do not impede communication, they prevent the vocabulary from reaching a higher band. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and ensuring that your word choices are precise and contextually appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('these buildings does not only attract', 'new buildings gets'), incorrect punctuation, and awkward phrasing ('might leads to injuries'). Some sentences are fragmented or lack proper structure, particularly in the final paragraph. While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors in basic grammar and sentence construction limit the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and proofreading for sentence completeness would significantly improve your writing.

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