Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that old buildings, such as town halls and art galleries, should be restored, even though this can be costly. Others argue that governments should replace them with new, modern buildings.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Although it is often asserted that ancient buildings having artistic value should be preserved, a contrasting opinion suggests that they should be demolished as it's not worth it and can end up costing a hefty amount. Despite the convenience of the latter, I firmly agree with the former view. Two main reasons behind me supporting the former view which is the aspect of conserving the artistic historical places as it is, are first we should never forget our past and value and respect them as a famous saying goes - One who don't respect history can't create history. Secondly thinking financially, it can generate revenue for the state or place by making it a tourist spot, this way it can be a win win situation for all.

A paramount reason to advocate for the approach is that every state has its own unique history that can include a different form of art, dance or clothing styles. Which we can only know if we keep preserving our previous generation's artifacts. If society becomes so selfish to modernise everything and decides to demolish the including historical monuments, nothing could be more mean. For instance just because our past generation have preserved the anciaent civilisation places like harappa an mohenjodaro we can still see the excellent architectural planning of the people centuries before.

Another key argument in favour of this perspective is that a town with no historical places is always dull and not recognised widely, whereas a simple monument or an artistic building can make the place lively attracting tourism internationally. The government can take further initiative by commercialising these places by adding a ticket system in its entrance which can then generate value for the overall development of the society and nation eventually.

On balance, while old building can destroyed and the formation of the new buildings might have valid considerations, the arguments that I support carry significantly greater weight in lots of perspectives including the values of respecting of history on priority without a second doubt and lastly, turning them into tourist spot to give the incredible heritage global recognition.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses all parts of the task, presenting both views and a clear personal position. The ideas are relevant, such as the cultural value of history and the economic potential of tourism. However, the development is somewhat uneven. The second paragraph relies on a slightly repetitive argument about 'selfishness' and 'mean' behavior, which lacks the academic tone required for a high band. While the position is clear, the supporting arguments could be more sophisticated and less reliant on emotive language to better meet the requirements for a Band 7.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, each with a clear central topic. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'first', 'secondly', 'for instance', and 'on balance', which help guide the reader. However, some transitions are mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'A paramount reason to advocate for the approach is that...'. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, and the flow between sentences could be smoother to achieve a more natural progression of ideas. The paragraphing is appropriate, but the overall cohesion is functional rather than sophisticated.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the writer to express their ideas clearly. There are attempts to use less common items like 'paramount', 'commercialising', and 'artifacts'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and collocation errors, such as 'the including historical monuments' (incorrect usage) and 'not recognised widely' (should be 'not widely recognized'). The range is sufficient to convey meaning, but the lack of precision and occasional awkward phrasing prevents it from reaching a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('One who don't respect history') and article usage ('the anciaent civilisation'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some run-on sentences and missing commas. While the writer attempts complex structures, the frequency of errors in basic grammar and syntax limits the score. To improve, the student should focus on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and ensuring consistent control over complex sentence forms.

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