Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that old buildings, such as town halls and art galleries, should be restored, even though this can be costly. Others argue that governments should replace them with new, modern buildings.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Over the past years their has been long debate about whether ancient structure should be remade or this could be demolish to make latest homes. While, remaking historical structure generate income to the government and create sense of history to the public. On the other hand making modern houses provides homes to needy.

Visiting to the old town halls and museums make an individual realize about the past events. This could lead us to understand history which helps us to not repeat the same mistake what was done in the past. In addition, it shows numerous sacrifices made by our ancestors. Moreover, nation also gets benefited by the revenue made by this organization. Indirectly responsible for improving economy. For example: France is attracted by many tourist from all over the world, resulting in huge profit for the country.

If we look on the other side of the scale, rebuilding this structures to modern facilities cannot be overlooked. Firstly, multiple nation has huge problem for space. Nowadays, many big cities is facing this issue (space management) due to lack of land. Resulting in inflation on real estate. Recreating this historical places can be used for needy. Providing shelter to poor's will somehow make cities more manageable. Secondly, this method could use to create a research labs for medicines, technologies etc. Creating jobs and much better life for future.

To conclude, I firmly stays with the decision to recreate this ancients art galleries and town halls for the sense of history within our hearts and contribute lots towards the economy.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response6.0
Coherence and Cohesion6.0
Lexical Resource5.5
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.5
Overall6.0

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion in the conclusion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat uneven. While the benefits of restoration are explained, the counter-argument regarding modern buildings is slightly underdeveloped and relies on generalisations about space management and real estate. The introduction is a bit weak, as it does not clearly paraphrase the prompt, and the conclusion is very brief. To reach a higher band, ensure that each body paragraph provides a more detailed explanation and a concrete example to fully support the points made.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'In addition', 'Moreover', and 'Firstly', but they are sometimes used in a mechanical way. There are also issues with referencing; for example, 'this structures' and 'this historical places' show inconsistent use of determiners. The flow between sentences is generally acceptable, but the lack of sophisticated linking devices makes the text feel slightly disjointed at times. Improving the variety and precision of cohesive links would enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are frequent errors in word choice and form. For instance, the student uses 'remade' instead of 'restored', 'demolish' instead of 'demolished', and 'needy' as a noun without a clear antecedent. There are also issues with collocations, such as 'making modern houses' instead of 'constructing modern buildings'. While the student attempts to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'inflation' and 'real estate', the range is limited, and the errors occasionally cause slight confusion for the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('their has been', 'nation has', 'cities is'), article usage ('the past events'), and pluralisation ('this structures', 'this historical places'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and singular/plural consistency would significantly improve the accuracy.

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