Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that old buildings, such as town halls and art galleries, should be restored, even though this can be costly. Others argue that governments should replace them with new, modern buildings.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In this Contemporary world, history carries an excellent image in individuals lives. Although some people believe that places like town halls and art galleries should be renovated even if it contain high expenses, while others state that modern architecture should be constructed

by authorities. Thus, this essay will discuss both views along with my opinion and examples in the forthcoming paragraphs.

On the one hand, folks are emotionally connected with some vintage buildings of the town because they have been visiting that since their childhood and they may involve these ancient halls in their proud memories. Consequently, renovation might be support them with making more beautiful memories. In addition, tourism is being encouraged by these famous architecture. Eventually, economy may obtain few benefits by getting earnings from visitors.

On the other hand, modern construction can assist to the people who require facilities. To illustrate, fitness centre, garden, enormous shopping malls could facilitate community to adopt luxiours lifestyle. Moreover, town would get several advantages for new construction by providing vibe of urban area due to having tall

and high-tech buildings which enforce

Smart automation and Sustainable

resources.

In my opinion, heritage structures

are more important as it not only provide

a chance for being connected with

roots of nation but also open the doors

for next generation to be aware from the

histroy of the country.

In conclusion, older properties which is

renovated could be greate source of

finance from travellers as well as it

helps people to stay attached towards

their roots and memories. Besides this, upcoming generation would be able to aware from their rich culture. However, modern buildings are still a crucial part for not only urban development but also to give lavish lifestyle.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both views and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention emotional connection and tourism for restoration, and facilities and urban development for new construction, these points could be expanded with more specific examples or deeper analysis. The introduction is slightly repetitive, and the conclusion restates points without adding significant value. To reach a higher band, ensure that each body paragraph fully explores the implications of the arguments rather than just listing them. The position is consistent, but the overall depth of the argument is currently at a mid-level.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas. You use cohesive devices such as 'On the one hand', 'In addition', and 'Consequently' to link sentences. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as 'Eventually, economy may obtain few benefits'. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, and the flow between sentences could be smoother. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different viewpoints, which helps the reader follow your argument. Improving the variety and precision of your linking words will help elevate this score.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'renovated', 'heritage structures', and 'sustainable resources'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'making more beautiful memories' (creating lasting memories), 'assist to the people' (assist people), and 'luxiours lifestyle' (luxurious). There are also some spelling errors like 'histroy' and 'greate'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning, the lack of precision and occasional errors prevent a higher score. Focus on learning common collocations to sound more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'older properties which is renovated', 'it not only provide') and article usage. Punctuation is generally functional, but there are some issues with sentence boundaries and awkward phrasing. The errors do not significantly impede communication, but they are frequent enough to be noticeable. To improve, focus on ensuring that verbs agree with their subjects and practice the correct use of articles and prepositions in complex sentence structures.

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