Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that old buildings, such as town halls and art galleries, should be restored, even though this can be costly. Others argue that governments should replace them with new, modern buildings.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

BULIDING AND OTHER PPRPARTY IDS THE BEST PART OF OUR TOWN THIS IS THE PROUD OF OUR SOURCE .WE HAVE SOME OLD BUILDING IN THIS TOWN .LIKE WILLOWBRROK IS THE OLDEST BUILDING IN THE TOWN ALSO THIS ONE IS SO EXPENSIVE AND SO CROWDED. IMN COMPAIRE OF NEW BUILDING.BUT I THOUGHT THIS ONE IS GOOD AND BEST THING IN THE TOWN.WE HAVE NOT NEED TO REPLCE IN NEW BUILDING."OLD IS GOLD" IS SLOGUNW IS BEETER OF OUE GANRATION .IN OTHER SIDE OF NEW BUILDING IN TOO MUCH FACILITY INCLUDED OF PAYNMENT SYSTEM .NEW BUILDING IS ONE PLACE OF SO MANY ITEMS LIKE ONE PALCE OF EVERY ITEMS IN COMPAIRE OF OLD BUILDING.THIS IS GOOD TO THE PRODUCT IN THE NEW BUILDING.IN THE LATEST GANRATION IS MOSTLY CHOOES TO HE NEW THING ON THE MARKET.SUCH AS A NEW AND UPDATED PRODUCT OF EVERY OLD ITEMS.I HAD SAME EXPERIANCE ON LAST WEEKEND.I VISITED AT ONE MALL ITS NAME IS THE BLUEPARK.THIS WAS A NEW UPDATED AND ALL SHPOES IN ON ONE MARKET.I WENT FOR THE PURCHSE CLOTHINGS FOR NEW LATEST COLLECATION.AND I SAW MANY OPTION OVER THERE .I WAS IMPRESSED ABOUT THAT.BUT I MPSTLY SUPOORT TO THE OLD BUILDING BECUSE OF THAIR COUNSTURCATION .OLD BUILDING IS MOSTLY STRONG SRUCTURE AND ALS0 INCULDED WITH THE OUR CLASSISC AND RELIGION.THIS ONE IS GOOD AND TOTALY SUPPORT WITH THE OUR TOWN AND THEIR HISTORY.SO TOTALY I SUPPORTED TO AS MAINTAIN OF THE OUR OLD BUILDING AS PAR THEIR CONDITIONS.I REQUEST TO OUE GIVERMENT THE TOUCH UP THE OUR OLD BUILDING AS PAR THE NEW BUILDING.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion, which is a requirement of the task. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention the benefits of modern buildings (facilities, convenience) and the value of old buildings (history, structure), the arguments are repetitive and lack depth. The essay relies on personal anecdotes rather than broader, more analytical reasoning. To improve, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a clear, distinct point and supports it with logical explanation rather than just stating preferences. The position is clear, but the overall development is quite basic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a clear paragraph structure, which makes it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of ideas. There is a lack of cohesive devices (such as 'furthermore', 'however', or 'consequently') to link sentences and ideas together. The text feels like a series of disjointed sentences rather than a cohesive argument. To improve, you should organize your thoughts into distinct paragraphs: one for the benefits of modern buildings, one for the importance of preserving old ones, and one for your conclusion. Using transition words will help guide the reader through your argument more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors (e.g., 'BULIDING', 'PPRPARTY', 'GANRATION', 'SHPOES'). Many words are used incorrectly or in a way that makes the meaning unclear, such as 'THIS IS THE PROUD OF OUR SOURCE'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas, relying on very basic terms. To improve, focus on learning the correct spelling of common words and expanding your vocabulary related to architecture, urban development, and history. Using a wider variety of descriptive adjectives and nouns will help you convey your points more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

There are frequent and severe grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, such as 'NEW BUILDING IS ONE PLACE OF SO MANY ITEMS LIKE ONE PALCE OF EVERY ITEMS IN COMPAIRE OF OLD BUILDING.' These errors often impede communication, forcing the reader to guess the intended meaning. The range of grammatical structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, punctuation, and the correct use of articles and verb tenses before attempting more complex structures.

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