Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that old buildings, such as town halls and art galleries, should be restored, even though this can be costly. Others argue that governments should replace them with new, modern buildings.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this contemporary era, it is reckoned by certain individuals that historical buildings need to be repaired by authority whereas, some consider that government ought to alter in new or as a modern one. Before reaching my opinion I will discuss the both of views in upcoming paragraphs.

To commence with, why ample of people opine that authority need to restored the older buildings while spending more money on it? certainly, yes, the predominant one is allocating more money on older building can preserve the not only cultural heritage but also saves the traditional artworks as this also has good impact on economy growth because excessive amount of visitors come from one place to another for streaming older building structure as well as watch the ancient history as leads to eventually impact on city economy due to which enhance the job opportunities of local or poor people. For instance, a survey had been conducted by UK pool government approximately 70% of needy individuals got basic jobs from older museums as as they can easily feel better for surviving.

Furthermore, If government replacing ancient buildings to modern ones, then people getting better facilities for living standard because modern infrastructure become not only spacious, more effective but also environment friendly as folks can easily increase the living standard. Moreover, in recent period modern buildings have commercial space and more parking or housing space as people not suffer from any issues. To exemplify, a recent article had been conducted by Hindustan magazine found that near around 82% of people living in better standard of life because they lived in tall or new infrastructure buildings as they become more and more comfortable.

As per as, I consider my opinion living in big or modern building is more worthy nowadays because folks will getting better facilities as well as get fully furnished home due to which they will not waste their own money to purchase anything.

In conclusion. although modern have own benefits to people but allocating money on old one save ancient values and save tradition as w

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For example, the argument regarding economic growth through tourism is a good point, but the supporting evidence—a 'UK pool government' survey—is vague and lacks credibility. Similarly, the second body paragraph relies on anecdotal evidence about 'Hindustan magazine' to support the preference for modern buildings. The conclusion is incomplete, cutting off mid-sentence, which prevents a full summary of the position. To reach a higher band, ensure that arguments are fully extended with more logical reasoning rather than relying on questionable statistics.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'As per as, I consider' are non-standard and disrupt the flow. There are also issues with referencing; for instance, the transition between the discussion of old buildings and the shift to modern ones is abrupt. The final paragraph is incomplete, which significantly impacts the overall coherence of the essay. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, logical progression would improve the score.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for higher bands. There are several instances of awkward word choices and incorrect collocations, such as 'alter in new', 'streaming older building', and 'UK pool government'. The student attempts to use some academic vocabulary, but these attempts are often imprecise or misused. Spelling is generally acceptable, but the overall range is limited, and the repetition of basic phrases like 'living standard' and 'modern buildings' restricts the ability to convey more nuanced ideas.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there is a high frequency of grammatical errors. Frequent issues include subject-verb agreement ('authority need to restored'), incorrect verb forms ('folks will getting'), and missing articles or prepositions. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas. While the meaning is generally clear despite these errors, the lack of control over complex structures prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors would be beneficial.

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