Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that old buildings, such as town halls and art galleries, should be restored, even though this can be costly. Others argue that governments should replace them with new, modern buildings.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In the modern era, although some people think that ancient buildings, like town halls and art galleries should be restored, others think that goverment authorities should replace it with an innovative buildings. From my point of view, both plays a pivotal role in the society as it ancient art and galleries represent our culture, while modern building significantly enhances individuals amenties, and opportunities for emplyoment.

On the one hand, there are plethora of resons for restoring ancient art and galleries can be costly even though we should protect our tradition buildings. Because it not only represents our rich cultural values but also these platforms serve both educational and entertainment purposes. In addition, town halls particulary help to children stay healthy as it enables to play indoor games. For instance,in India, these museums are constructed by our great freedom fighters. Furthermore, they did a lot of battels and sacrifies their lives. So that, governments and citizens should have incredible responsiblity to protect it for the future generations.

On the other hand, constructing modern buildings are also important for individuals' amenities, and commerical purposes. Nowadays, many graduate students are facing significantly unemployment issues as if modern buildings establish manufacture factories and business organisations, it will create an employment opportunity to the graduates. For example, in London, local authories helped citizes with this innovative notion, it gave huge positive response in the economy.

In conclusion, many people argue taht restoring ancient museums such as community halls and art galleries can be costly eventhough we should protect it, however others think that governments should substitute them with innovative buildings. As far as concerned, undoubtedly, both play a siginficant role in the society. Consequently, governement authorities conserve ancient buildings as well as innovative buildings to invest money on these construction.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion in the introduction and conclusion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat inconsistent. While the points regarding cultural heritage and economic development are relevant, the supporting arguments are occasionally underdeveloped or lack logical clarity, such as the claim that town halls help children stay healthy through indoor games. The conclusion is slightly repetitive of the introduction rather than synthesising the main points. To reach a higher band, ensure that each supporting example is directly linked to the core argument and provides a more sophisticated justification.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into clear paragraphs, and there is a logical progression of ideas from the introduction to the conclusion. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'On the one hand', 'In addition', and 'Furthermore', which help guide the reader. However, some transitions are mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'So that, governments and citizens should have...'. Additionally, there are instances where referencing is unclear, such as the use of 'it' when referring to plural nouns like 'buildings'. Improving the variety and precision of linking words would enhance the flow of the essay.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the student to express their ideas clearly. There are attempts to use less common vocabulary, such as 'pivotal role', 'amenities', and 'innovative notion'. However, there are several spelling errors ('goverment', 'resons', 'battels', 'sacrifies', 'taht', 'siginficant') and minor collocation issues ('substitute them with' instead of 'replace them with'). While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more careful proofreading and a wider range of precise, topic-specific vocabulary to reach a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the student attempts complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('both plays a pivotal role', 'buildings are also important') and article usage. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some run-on sentences and missing commas. The errors are noticeable and occur throughout the text, though they rarely prevent the reader from understanding the intended meaning. To improve, the student should focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and refining the use of complex sentence structures.

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