Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that old buildings, such as town halls and art galleries, should be restored, even though this can be costly. Others argue that governments should replace them with new, modern buildings.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Opinions are divided in this topic. Some people believe that government should preserve our history monuments even though it can be costly. However many people strongly believe that government should replace old building from new building.
Historical builds represent our history. historical buildings, galleries and hall represent our culture and art. Beautiful historic monuments attract tourists from all over world. For example, Tajmahal from Agra attract tourists all over the world. Its is also called symbol of love. It is well known monuments of India. tourism bring significant revenue for economy. But mostly historical buildings need restoration an maintenance in certain time even though it can be costly we should preserve it because it is our identity.
on the other hand, many people believe in modernization. they need buildings, galleries and halls in new style
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The student attempts to address both views regarding the restoration versus replacement of old buildings, and provides some reasons such as tourism revenue and cultural identity. However, the response is severely underdeveloped and abruptly cut off, lacking a clear personal opinion and a proper conclusion. Furthermore, the length requirement of at least 250 words is not met, as the response contains only 135 words. According to the task achievement descriptors, this partial address of the prompt and extreme under-length severely limits the score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay displays basic organization with an introductory sentence and some body paragraphs, but paragraphing is erratic and incomplete, as seen at the end of the text. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes repetitive. Phrases like 'on the other hand' introduce a contrasting view, but the paragraph is left as a single fragmented sentence. The progression of ideas is disjointed due to the incomplete nature of the response, placing it firmly at the lower-middle bands.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The student uses a limited range of vocabulary with several inaccuracies and spelling errors, such as 'history monuments' instead of 'historic monuments', 'Tajmahal' as one word, and 'an maintenance' instead of 'and maintenance'. While there is an attempt to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'restoration', 'revenue', and 'culture', the overall lexical control is weak, and word forms are frequently incorrect, which restricts the score to this band level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control is weak with frequent basic errors. Examples include missing articles ('government should replace old building from new building'), capitalization errors ('on the other hand'), and subject-verb agreement issues ('tourism bring significant revenue'). Punctuation is also problematic, with run-on sentences and uncapitalized sentence beginnings. However, meaning is generally discernible despite these frequent grammatical flaws.
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