Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that old buildings, such as town halls and art galleries, should be restored, even though this can be costly. Others argue that governments should replace them with new, modern buildings.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is undeniable that people are very close with their anciant culture and haritage. some mlutitudes want to protect and preserve their valuable art galleries, however, others believes that we should build new shopping malls, apartments, sports club and all rather than redeveloped old buildings. before going to the quik conclusion I will discuss both the initiative views with my own opinion alog with relevent example to prove it.

To beging with, old art gelleries play a pramount role to contribute to the economy as people want to see their national haritage and they come to see the beautifull, amazing, and art-crafts work in these buildings and they pay ticket costs to see those buildings. For an enstance, The Taj Mahal in India, therefore it is beneficial to preserve old buildings.

On the paradoxical side, other components said that develop new buildings are better option rather than restored old buildings as sometimes these buildings very dengerous for the humen beings because of environment desaster like earthquaks demeged these building and it harmful hore humen life.

In my opinion, restoretion of old building is crusial for to protect and remember our culture as well as teach oue children about our art and crafts work, but protecting humen life should not be neglected as they can increase the chance of success, effectiveness, quality of life, and a positive environment.

To conclude, redeveloped of old building is essencial as it can tell the story about our ancestores and a good source of boost the income of nation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both views regarding old and new buildings and includes a personal opinion. However, the ideas remain somewhat limited and under-developed. For instance, the second body paragraph mentions the economic benefits of art galleries and provides an example with the Taj Mahal, but this point is not fully extended. Similarly, the counterargument concerning safety risks from earthquakes is presented simply without deeper elaboration. Your position is generally clear throughout the text, yet the development of supporting arguments stops short of being fully fleshed out, which places this aspect of your writing within the mid-level descriptors where some ideas receive more attention than others.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with a recognisable introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. You use basic cohesive devices to connect your ideas, such as "To beging with" and "On the paradoxical side". However, the referencing and mechanical links can sometimes feel repetitive or slightly unnatural, which is characteristic of this level. While paragraphing is present to separate different perspectives, the logical progression between sentences occasionally feels abrupt. To progress further, aim to use a wider variety of transitional phrases more naturally and ensure that referencing words clearly link back to preceding ideas without disrupting the flow of the argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You demonstrate an adequate vocabulary range for the task, attempting less common lexical items such as "heritage", "paradoxical", and "restoration". However, there are noticeable spelling and word choice errors throughout the response, including words like "anciant", "mlutitudes", "gelleries", "pramount", "enstance", "dengerous", "desaster", and "crusial". These errors occasionally cause some difficulty for the reader and reveal limitations in precision and word formation. To improve, focus on mastering the correct spelling of common academic words and pay closer attention to natural collocations when attempting to use more sophisticated vocabulary in your writing tasks.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response utilizes a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty. There are noticeable errors in grammar, plurals, and prepositions, such as "others believes", "develop new buildings are better option", "humen beings", "hore humen life", and "cruisial for to protect". These frequent grammatical errors and punctuation slips can cause difficulty for the reader at times. To reach a higher level, you need to exercise greater control over basic grammatical agreements, verb forms, and prepositional patterns, while reducing the frequency of structural errors in your complex sentences.

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