Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that old buildings, such as town halls and art galleries, should be restored, even though this can be costly. Others argue that governments should replace them with new, modern buildings.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Old buildings like town halls and art galleries are the demonstration of the cultural heritage of the nation. They represents the history of the society that they are very much proud of. Usually every country has its own history and culture, which includes the ancient work of their artists, painters, poets, authors, etc.

There is a great debate among the intellectuals in all over the world about the restoration of these ancient buildings because they depicts the art which attracts the tourists from every where. They further argue that demolition of such buildings will discourage the appeal of art in their younger generations and the heroes in the field of art, they will look up to, will be completely vanished. Moreover, the economy of some countries is heavily dependent upon the tourism which will be drastically impacted after the loss of such kind of heritage altogether.

On the other hand, modern age people and younger generations contradict with the earlier notion of the restoration of the art constructions. They see them as the wastage of time. According to them, it will be much more beneficial to alter them with new age buildings like IT towers, business hubs, etc. as they will result in the familiarisation of new generations with upcoming technologies and challenges.

In the recent times, everything is classified in the terms of financial benefits, therefore, in my opinion, the restoration of the ancient buildings must be ensured as it will ultimately restore the tourism in the country. For example, the National Museum of Pakistan, located in Lahore, is restored recently and during a brief conversation with its Manager, he informed me about the significant increase in the number of visitors in the National Museum.

Although, the redevelopment activities could be expensive but the returns it could give, would be long-lasting.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both views and make your own position clear: you support restoring historic buildings, while explaining that others favour replacing them with facilities such as IT towers and business hubs. The tourism argument is relevant, and the National Museum example gives your opinion some support. This meets the task well, but the two sides are not developed equally. The case for replacement is mainly asserted as a benefit to younger generations, without explaining why modern buildings are needed or how they would serve the public better. The heritage and tourism points also overlap somewhat. To strengthen the response, develop each side with a distinct reason and a specific explanation, then connect your example more directly to the wider argument.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph for each viewpoint, and a concluding opinion. Linking phrases such as “On the other hand,” “Moreover,” and “For example” help readers follow the discussion. The progression is generally logical, though some connections are mechanical or unclear. For instance, “They further argue” does not identify precisely who “they” refers to, and the first paragraph’s list of artists and writers does not lead clearly into the next point. The final paragraph combines your opinion, an example, and a concession, so its focus becomes less controlled. Use clearer references and make each paragraph develop one main point in a deliberate sequence to improve cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of topic-related vocabulary, including “cultural heritage,” “demolition,” “tourism,” and “redevelopment.” These choices make the subject clear, and you attempt more formal expressions. However, some less common phrases are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “the demonstration of the cultural heritage,” “alter them with new age buildings,” and “restore the tourism.” There are also word-choice and spelling issues, including “every where” and “familiarisation of new generations with upcoming technologies.” These do not prevent understanding, but they limit precision and naturalness. Prefer established collocations and check whether a phrase expresses the intended relationship—for example, buildings can be replaced by modern ones, while tourism can be supported or boosted.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including relative clauses and concession, as in “Although the redevelopment activities could be expensive…” This shows some range, and the main ideas remain understandable. However, errors in agreement, articles, sentence construction, and punctuation recur. For example, “They represents” should be “They represent,” and “they depicts” should be “they depict.” The opening sentence also needs a clearer grammatical construction, while “Although, the redevelopment activities…” has an unnecessary comma after the conjunction. Some long sentences, particularly the one beginning “There is a great debate,” are difficult to control. Review subject–verb agreement and punctuation, and divide overloaded sentences into clearer units.

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