Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that old buildings, such as town halls and art galleries, should be restored, even though this can be costly. Others argue that governments should replace them with new, modern buildings.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Some argue that old buildings such as town halls and art galleries should be renovated, even though this can be costly. Others, however, believe that these buildings should be replaced with the new ones. Although replacing them with modern buildings may prevent them from collapse, I believe restoring them can help preserve their historical significance.

Constructing the old monuments from scratch may prevent them from collapse. Since several town halls and art galleries were built a long ago in history, their ageing materiasl can cause them collapse. Therefore, re-constructing by using strong construction materials may give them a fresh life. Moreover, they can be re-built by following a modern structure which will provide several facilities to disabled people. As in various old buildings, the entrance is either too narrow or without necessary railing which may make it difficult for these people to visit them. Hence, replacing with modern structures can give them an opportunity to visit these places.

On the contrary, restoring the old monuments can help preserve their historial significance. Some monuments are known for their architecture such as the Taj Mahal in India which is built with a special white marble. Tourists generally visit this building to experience the beauty of its structure. Therefore, if it is replaced with a modern style building, it may lose its historial value. As a result, a significant decrease can be seen in the number of tourists visit this place. Thus, if these monuments are renovated only, these can be prevented from collapse and can still demonstrate their historical value.

In conclusion, even though re-contructing the ageing monuments can prevent them from collapse, renovating could help them preserving their traditional and historical significance.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both sides of the discussion and state a clear preference for restoration in the introduction and conclusion. The case for replacement is relevant: you explain that rebuilding could prevent collapse and improve access for disabled visitors. The Taj Mahal example also supports your point about preserving architectural and historical value. This meets the task well, but some ideas are more fully explained than others. In particular, the claim that replacement would lead to fewer tourists is asserted rather than developed, and the distinction between restoring a building and reconstructing it could be clearer. To strengthen the response, explain the likely consequences of each option more precisely and support the less-developed claims with a specific reason or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph for each view, and a conclusion that restates your position. Linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “On the contrary,” and “Therefore” help signal relationships between ideas. The progression is generally easy to follow, although some connections feel mechanical or are not fully logical. For example, “Thus, if these monuments are renovated only” does not clearly follow from the preceding point about tourism, and “these” has an unclear reference. The conclusion also repeats the main contrast without adding a final synthesis. Use referencing that clearly identifies the buildings or ideas, and make sure each linking phrase expresses the precise relationship between adjacent sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “historical significance,” “architecture,” “construction materials,” and “facilities for disabled people.” These choices communicate the main ideas, and you attempt some less common expressions. However, several word-choice and collocation problems make the writing less natural, such as “constructing the old monuments from scratch,” “give them a fresh life,” and “prevented from collapse.” There are also spelling errors, including “materiasl,” “historial,” and “re-contructing.” Aim for more precise combinations, such as “rebuild ageing structures,” “extend their useful life,” and “prevent them from collapsing.” Proofreading spelling and checking collocations would make your vocabulary more accurate and flexible.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including subordinate clauses beginning “Although,” “Since,” and “if.” Most of the argument remains understandable, but some grammatical errors recur and occasionally make relationships less clear. For example, “built a long ago in history” has an incorrect article and time expression, while “can cause them collapse” is missing “to.” In “the number of tourists visit this place,” the clause needs a form such as “who visit,” and “help them preserving” should be “help preserve them” or “help them preserve.” The final sentence also has an unclear construction: “renovating could help them preserving.” Review verb patterns after “help,” infinitives after “cause,” and relative clauses, while continuing to use varied sentence structures.

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