Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that old buildings, such as town halls and art galleries, should be restored, even though this can be costly. Others argue that governments should replace them with new, modern buildings.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

yes we belive the old buildings town halls and art galleries should be restored because these are our old culture they save our traditions we need these things specially art galleries before 1990's we have alot art galleries we arrange lot of art axibition and see art work but right now these things are finished and destroyed people have no interest for these things.

we have town halls for events in every areas peopkle arrange the events marriages and fun activites get togethers we have alot of old buildings in kharadar in karachi . they have specific look but many of people like these buliding because they shows culture of the Pakistan but their bulding structure made in the 1997 so people are scared to live in these bulding but some people live because live here from the starts but some people are says to destroyed these building and construct the new and modren buildings because olding structure are two risky no one knows when these building are lay down and we loss many of the lifes .

so everything have different aspects old things are good but they have limited lives to survive when we enter in new centuries we have different architecture to create new and morden things old things are costly but same price we found the new one better then the old . so goverment need replace these buldings from new and morden buldings .

every thing have a life to stay when the lives end the new thing replace that old one that is naturally phenomena

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear final preference for replacing old buildings, while also recognising their cultural value and explaining why some people want them preserved. The examples of Karachi’s old buildings and town halls used for gatherings make the discussion relevant. However, the two views are not developed evenly: the case for restoration is mainly expressed through broad claims about culture and art galleries, while the case for replacement includes a more specific concern about structural danger and loss of life. Your position also emerges most clearly near the end rather than being established and maintained throughout. To strengthen the response, explain how restoration could preserve heritage safely, and support your preference for replacement with a more precise example or comparison. (The length requirement is met.)

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic overall structure: it introduces preservation, moves to the safety argument for replacement, and ends with your opinion. Paragraph breaks help distinguish these stages, and phrases such as “but” and “so” signal some relationships between ideas. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow because several points are joined together without clear links. For example, the discussion moves from town halls and events to Karachi’s buildings, their appearance, their age, and safety concerns in one long paragraph. The conclusion repeats the idea that old things have a limited life rather than drawing the main arguments together. Use clearer topic sentences and organise each paragraph around one main point, with linking phrases that show contrast, cause, and result.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “traditions,” “art galleries,” “architecture,” and “structure,” so the reader can identify the subject and your main concerns. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “old buildings,” “new and modern,” and “things.” Frequent spelling errors, such as “bulidings,” “goverment,” and “axibition,” make the writing less clear and reduce the accuracy of your vocabulary. Some expressions are also imprecise, for example “old culture” and “limited lives to survive.” Build a more varied set of terms for heritage, restoration, safety, and redevelopment, and check spelling and collocations carefully. More precise wording would help you express the contrast between cultural value and structural risk.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, including the contrast in “old things are good but they have limited lives to survive,” and you use some simple sentence forms to communicate your opinion. However, the range of structures is limited, and errors in sentence formation and basic grammar occur frequently, sometimes making relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “these are our old culture they save our traditions” joins clauses without appropriate punctuation or a linking structure, while “they shows culture” has a subject–verb agreement error. There are also problems with articles, plurals, and verb forms, as in “the new one” and “people are says.” Practise building accurate sentences with one main idea, then combine them using controlled clauses and correct punctuation.

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