Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · IELTS Predictions Nov 2026 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the percentage of the population aged over 60 in 2000 and in the predicted year 2050 in eight countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The table illustrates the proportion of the population aged over 60 in 2000 and in the predicted year 2050 in eight nations.

Overall, Japan is by far the most populated country in both 2000 and predicted 2050, while Nigeria accounts for least populated. India and brazil share same proportion of population in 2000.

In 2000, Japan has the highest proportion of population with aged over 60 with 23 percent, followed by UK with 21 percent and other nations China, Mexico,and US accounts for 10, 7 and 16 percent proportion respectively. Although, Nigerai being least populated with 5 percent, India and Brazil share equal proportion with 8 percent.

In terms of predicted 2050 in population with age over 60, Japan remains the highest with 43 percent, followed by China with 36 percent proportion. Other countries India, Brazil, Mexico, UK, US accounts for 21, 29, 25, 32 and 28 percent respectively. Nigeria still remains the least populated country with 10 percent.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the two years and cover all eight countries, and several figures are reported accurately, including Japan’s 23% and 43% and Nigeria’s 5% and 10%. However, the overview misinterprets the table: Japan is not the most populated country; it has the highest proportion of people aged over 60. Likewise, Nigeria has the lowest proportion, not the least-populated population. The response also gives little meaningful comparison beyond ranking countries, and the 2000 figures for China, Mexico and the US are presented in a confusing sequence. The response is 143 words, below the required 150. To improve, give a clear overview of the overall rise and the largest and smallest proportions, then compare key changes accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for 2000 and 2050. This makes the two time periods easy to locate. However, progression within the detail paragraphs is not always smooth. For example, the 2000 sentence groups China, Mexico and the US in an awkward order, while the overview repeats information that is then stated again. Linking words such as “Overall,” “followed by,” and “In terms of” provide some connection, but “Although” is used incorrectly to introduce Nigeria’s figure. Organise each year’s figures in a consistent order, and use comparisons to connect related data rather than listing values. This would make the progression clearer and reduce repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant task vocabulary such as “proportion,” “population,” “predicted,” and “accounts for,” so the reader can generally understand the subject. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or repetitive. “Most populated country” and “least populated” refer to total population, not the share aged over 60; “highest proportion” and “lowest proportion” are more precise. Phrases such as “with age over 60” and “share same proportion” are also unnatural, and “Nigerai” is misspelled. Aim for accurate collocations and vary how you describe figures, for example “stood at,” “was projected to reach,” and “the proportion increased.” Proofread country names and avoid repeating “proportion” in adjacent clauses.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You produce several understandable simple sentences and attempt longer structures, including “while” and “Although.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences awkward. For example, “India and brazil share same proportion” needs an article and correct capitalisation, while “Japan has the highest proportion of population with aged over 60” has an incorrect construction. There are also agreement and tense inconsistencies, as in “Other countries … accounts for,” and the past figures are sometimes described with the present tense (“Japan has”). The sentence beginning “Although, Nigerai…” is not grammatically complete as written. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and build comparisons with complete clauses, checking articles, agreement, and punctuation.

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