Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that playing team sports, such as football, is more beneficial than playing individual sports, such as tennis or swimming. Others believe individual sports are more beneficial.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

It is often argued that playing team sports, such as football, is more beneficial than playing individual sports, such as tennis or swimming while some others argue individual sports are more beneficial. In my opinion both views have same merit. I believe that out door sports such as football and cricket are more beneficial than in door games. In the following paragraphs I will discuss both views carefully.

On the one hand, there are sevaral reasons that is why I agree football and other out door games are more important than tennis and swimming. Tennis and swimming also very important games but in this sports people perform by brain only with out any physical work. The main reason is that during playing cricket player perform many activities such as some time they run and some time they talk with friends about game. By playing out door sports many changes occur in people. For example they improve their physical health and also improve mental health and the important benefit that strike the mind of the people is that people give their free time to cricket and some other games and they no adapt in bed habits.

On the other hand, some individuals believe that boththe games are important. For instance, they give same level to tennis and foolball because they tell both gams help improving health and make body fit.

In conclusion, I believe that playing football and other out door games are more benefits than playing in door sports such as on mobile phone and other games tennis and swimming.

On the other hand, some other people believe that

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You introduce the topic and state a position—“both views have same merit”—and you give some relevant points about health and using free time. However, the response only minimally addresses the required comparison. Most of the discussion shifts to outdoor versus indoor activities, which is not the same distinction as team versus individual sports; tennis and swimming are incorrectly described as involving “brain only” and no physical work. The opposing view receives only a brief, unsupported sentence, and your conclusion changes your position to favouring outdoor sports without resolving the original comparison. To improve, explain specific benefits of team sports and individual sports separately, support each with a relevant example, and maintain one clear opinion throughout. The response meets the stated length requirement; 19 words copied from the task prompt were not counted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is an attempt to organise the response with an introduction, two body sections signalled by “On the one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion. These markers make the intended structure visible. However, progression is difficult to follow because the discussion moves from team versus individual sports to outdoor versus indoor activities, and the second body paragraph gives little explanation. The final lines also include a repeated, unfinished sentence—“On the other hand, some other people believe that”—after the conclusion, which disrupts the ending. Some linking phrases are mechanical, and references such as “both the games” are unclear. Build each paragraph around one side of the question, connect examples directly to its main point, and remove the stray repeated line.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use basic topic vocabulary such as “team sports,” “physical health,” “mental health,” and “free time,” so the general subject is usually recognisable. However, the range is repetitive and several word choices or collocations make ideas unclear: “perform by brain only,” “changes occur in people,” and “strike the mind” do not express the intended meanings naturally. There are also spelling and form errors, including “sevaral,” “foolball,” “gams,” and “boththe.” Use more precise terms for the benefits being discussed, such as cooperation, discipline, fitness, or personal responsibility, and check spelling carefully. Distinguish “outdoor” from “indoor,” but keep the essay focused on team and individual sports rather than substituting that contrast.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a reason introduced by “because” and examples introduced by “For example.” However, grammatical control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to understand. Examples include “both views have same merit” (missing article), “there are sevaral reasons that is why I agree” (faulty clause structure and agreement), and “Tennis and swimming also very important games” (missing verb). Subject–verb agreement and verb forms are also problematic in “player perform” and “games are more benefits.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation need attention, particularly in the long opening sentence and the unfinished final line. Practise accurate basic clauses first, then add complex sentences with clear subjects, verbs, and punctuation.

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