Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie chart illustrates that how young people had worked in a particular estate spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Overall, the working hours had 33% in 1958 and it boosts to 42% in 2008. The youth spent their mostly time in sleeping which was 32% and it reduces to 25% in 2008.

The 19% of the youth going out with friend and family in 1958 and in 2008 it was reduced to 6%.Travelling to work had very least percentage in the first year and it was rapidly increases to 7% in the next given year. The interest and spent time on the sports had almost same in every two years. The people usually spent their time on relaxin at home in 2008 and it decreases to 8% in 1958.

The young people mostly spent their time on sleeping in 1958 and IT steadily decrese to 25% in

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify several important changes, including working rising from 33% to 42%, sleeping falling from 32% to 25%, and socialising dropping from 19% to 6%. However, the overview is incomplete and the response does not accurately cover all chart categories: sports appears only in 2008, at 7%, so saying it was “almost same in every two years” is unsupported. The description of relaxing at home also reverses the direction: it rose from 8% to 13%, rather than decreasing. The final sentence is unfinished, and the response is one word below the required minimum. To improve, give a concise overview of the main increases and decreases, report the figures accurately, and include every relevant category without adding unsupported claims.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure, with an opening, an overview, and a paragraph containing comparisons. Some information is grouped by activity, which helps the reader follow the chart. However, progression is weakened by repetition: sleeping is discussed in the overview and then repeated in the final, incomplete sentence. The final line ends at “in,” leaving the response unfinished, while the transition between the socialising and travel figures is abrupt. Several comparisons are also difficult to follow because the year order is not consistently expressed. Organise the details into a clear sequence—major increases, then decreases—and use complete sentences and clear links between comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “reduced,” “travelling to work,” and “spent their time,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate or awkward, such as “it boosts,” “the interest and spent time on the sports,” and “relaxin at home.” “Young people” and “youth” are also not supported by the chart, which refers to working adults. Spelling errors such as “decrese” reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, neutral terms for chart reporting and use consistent labels from the visual, such as “working adults,” “leisure time,” and “participation in sports.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple statements and longer comparisons, but control is uneven, and errors sometimes make relationships between figures unclear. For example, “The pie chart illustrates that how…” has an incorrect clause structure, while “The 19% of the youth going out…” lacks a finite verb. Verb forms are also problematic in “it boosts,” “it was rapidly increases,” and “it steadily decrese.” The final sentence is incomplete, and punctuation is missing after “6%.” Practise forming complete subject–verb sentences and keeping tense and verb forms consistent when describing past data. A reliable pattern is: “The proportion spent on X rose from … in 1958 to … in 2008.”

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