Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given two pie charts illustrate the percentage of the day spent by working adults on various activities in a particular country in the year of 1958 and 2008.

Overall, it can be observed that maximum time spent on work by employees throughout the period. Whereas, travelling to work recorded least share among various activities.

Turning to the details, it is evident from first pie chart, In 1958 , working was the dominant activity of spending time by working employees at 33%, followed by sleeping contributed to 32% share . Going out with friend/ family time spent by workers at 19%. Additionally, travelling to work and Relaxing at home recorded lowest share 2% and 8% respectively.

Furthermore, In 2008, workers expend time on working activity which increased significantly to 42% . However , spent time by employees on sleeping experienced a sharp decline to 25%.Relaxing at home activity rose marginally by 5% . Playing sports and travelling to work activities shared a similar trend by7% each .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main pattern that work took the largest share in both years and report several relevant figures, including work rising from 33% to 42% and sleeping falling from 32% to 25%. The comparison of relaxing at home also reflects the chart. However, the overview is not fully accurate: travelling was the smallest category in 1958, but in 2008 it was tied with sports at 7%, while going out with friends and family was lowest at 6%. That substantial fall from 19% to 6% is also an important feature and is omitted. Some details, such as the 2008 figures for going out, are therefore less fully covered. A more precise overview and fuller comparison of the major changes would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the two years. This makes the information easy to follow, and transitions such as “Turning to the details” and “Furthermore” help signal progression. The organisation is coherent, but some connections are mechanical or unclear. For example, “Whereas, travelling to work recorded least share” is a fragment-like contrast that does not connect smoothly to the preceding sentence. Within the detail paragraphs, the figures are mostly listed rather than compared across years, and the 2008 paragraph does not mention the change in going out. To move further, link related changes directly and use referencing and transitions more naturally, while maintaining the effective paragraph structure.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “dominant activity,” “share,” “decline,” and “rose marginally,” and the reader can generally understand the comparisons. There are also attempts to vary wording rather than repeat “spent time.” However, several choices are inaccurate or awkward: “maximum time spent on work” and “lowest share” are not natural in these contexts, while “workers expend time on working activity” is an unsuitable collocation. “Going out with friend/family” also needs more natural phrasing and accurate plural forms. These issues do not prevent understanding, but they limit precision and fluency. Prefer standard chart language such as “accounted for,” “the smallest proportion,” and “the time devoted to work,” and check collocations when paraphrasing the chart labels.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex forms, including a contrast with “However” and a relative clause in “activities shared a similar trend.” Meaning is usually recoverable, but some grammatical errors recur. The overview sentence “maximum time spent on work by employees” lacks a complete verb structure, and “Whereas, travelling to work recorded least share” is not a complete, well-formed contrast. There are also problems with articles and sentence boundaries, as in “from first pie chart, In 1958” and “25%.Relaxing,” as well as inconsistent comma spacing and capitalisation. The phrase “workers expend time” also uses an incorrect verb form for this context. Build complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs, then proofread punctuation and articles; this will improve accuracy while preserving your attempts at varied structures.

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