Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart illustrates how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Overall, among all the activities, the working percentage of the adults in both the years is the highest. Followed by sleeping as thr highest in both years. Moreover in 1958,least percentage of adults travelled to work and least but same percentage of adults played sports and travelled to work in 2008.

The percentages of day spent by working adults varied from 1958 to 2008. The percentage of the working population in 1958 was 33% which rose to 42% in 2008. Adults in 1958 spent their 32% of the time sleeping which was decresed to 25% by 2008.In 1958, 8% was spent relaxing at home while it was 13% in 2008. Furthermore other activites like going out with friends/family decreased by 13% in 2008-that is from 19% to 6% in the latter year. The least amount of time was spent travelling to work in 1958 ws of 2% which slightly increased to 7% in 2008 therefore having the same time spent playing sports.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main overall pattern: working takes the largest share in both years, while its proportion rises and sleeping and socialising decline. Most figures are reported accurately, including work (33% to 42%), sleep (32% to 25%), and time with friends or family (19% to 6%). The overview also notes the smallest category in 1958 and the equal 7% shares for commuting and sport in 2008. This covers the task well, with some features more fully supported than others: the new sports category in 2008 is mentioned only in the overview, and the comparison of commuting is not clearly framed as a rise from 2% to 7%. A more precise overview and fuller comparison of these changes would strengthen the response further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to a paragraph of figures, and the main comparisons can generally be followed. However, progression within the overview is uneven: “Followed by sleeping as the thr highest in both years” is an incomplete sentence, and the next point about the least percentages is difficult to interpret. Linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “Furthermore,” and “therefore” are used, but some connections are mechanical or unclear; “therefore having the same time spent playing sports” does not clearly show the relationship between commuting and sport. Grouping increases together and decreases together, with clearer sentence links and references, would make the information easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing charts, including “percentage,” “decreased,” “increased,” and “spent relaxing at home,” and the activity labels are generally clear. However, some word choices and collocations are awkward or imprecise, such as “the working percentage of the adults,” “spent their 32% of the time,” and “the least amount of time was spent travelling … was of 2%.” There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “thr,” “decresed,” and “activites,” which reduce the accuracy and polish of the report. Aim for standard chart language and check spelling: for example, say “the proportion of time spent working” and “accounted for 2%.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, and the main numerical comparisons are usually understandable. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly in sentence construction and clause formation. “Followed by sleeping as thr highest in both years” is a fragment, while “Adults in 1958 spent their 32% of the time sleeping” has an awkwardly formed object and possessive. In “The least amount of time was spent travelling to work in 1958 ws of 2%,” the sentence structure breaks down, and missing spaces after full stops make boundaries less clear. Use complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check articles, word order, and punctuation when combining comparisons.

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