Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The pie chart illustrated the employed adults passed their time in a specific country between 1958 and 2008.

Overall, the chart showed that employed senior citizens are spent most of the time in working and then sleeping. They spent few time in outing with their families. Fewer time in traveling.

The sharply change occurred in going outside with families this figure goes from 19% to just 6% in 2008. After that working time is increased 11%. In 1958 adults spent 33% time in working and in 2008 it increased from 33% to 43%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify two important changes: the share of time spent working rises, while going out with friends or family falls sharply. The figures of 19% and 6% for going out are accurate, and the increase in working is correctly described, although the 2008 figure is 42%, not 43%. However, the overview is unclear and includes unsupported claims: “employed senior citizens” is not specified by the chart, and the statement that adults spent most time working and then sleeping does not describe both years accurately. Several key categories, including relaxing at home, travelling and sports, are omitted. The response is also 57 words below the required minimum, leaving the summary substantially incomplete. Include a clearer overview and report more of the main comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic structure, with an opening, an overview paragraph and a final paragraph describing changes. This gives the reader some sense of how the information is organised. However, progression is limited: the final paragraph mentions only going out and working, without grouping or comparing the other activities. Linking phrases such as “After that” do not clearly show a meaningful sequence between these categories, and “this figure” has an unclear reference. The short paragraphs also leave the account feeling incomplete. To improve, organise the details into a clear comparison of activities that increased and decreased, and use precise references and transitions to connect the figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing charts, including “increased,” “figure” and “spent,” and the reader can understand the main changes you intend to report. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “passed their time,” “employed senior citizens,” “few time” and “going outside with families.” These expressions sometimes make the meaning less precise, particularly when the chart refers to working adults generally and to going out with friends or family. Aim for standard chart language and accurate activity labels, such as “the proportion of time spent working” and “socialising.” Vary the verbs used to describe changes, while keeping the chart’s categories and population precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and a longer sentence describing a change, but the range of structures is limited and errors occur frequently. For example, “employed senior citizens are spent” has an incorrect verb construction, while “They spent few time” has a determiner and noun-form problem. The sentence “In 1958 adults spent 33% time in working” also lacks the grammatical forms needed to express a percentage of time naturally. Some sentences remain understandable, but these recurring errors make the account less fluent and can obscure relationships between ideas. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and basic percentage constructions, then combine them into controlled comparative sentences.

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