Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The two pie chart give information about how adults spend their time on various activities in the two years 1958 and 2008.

Overall, In the beginning of the period, Adults spend most of the tome working. While travelling to work made up the smallest segment, In comparison at the end of the period, Working still the propotion, And the lowest rate made up by going out with friends/ family.

In 1958, working acounted for 33% of adults time, It rose to 42% in the end,Ramxin at home made up8% of adults time then became 13% at the end, Travelling to work started by 2% which was lowest rate, It rose slightly by 5% in 2008.

to look at more detail, Relaxing at home decreased by 4%, Sleeping and going out with friends made up 32% and and19

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the two years and report several relevant figures, including working rising from 33% to 42%, relaxing at home increasing from 8% to 13%, and commuting increasing from 2% to 7%. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: working was the largest category in both years, not just at the beginning, and the smallest category in 2008 was shared by travelling and sports at 7%, rather than going out with friends and family at 6%? In fact, going out was 6%, so it was the smallest. The final paragraph is incomplete and omits key changes, especially the fall in sleeping and socialising and the appearance of sports. The response also falls 13 words short of the required minimum. Develop a complete overview and report the main comparisons accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is an attempt to organise the response into an introduction, an overview and detail paragraphs, and the years provide a basic framework for comparison. However, progression is difficult to follow because the overview combines several ideas in a confusing sentence, while the final paragraph begins with “to look at more detail” but ends abruptly after “32% and and19”. Linking words such as “While” and “In comparison” are used, but their relationships are not always clear, and the long detail sentence strings figures together without clear separation. Use one paragraph for a concise overview and separate the detailed comparisons into logically grouped sentences, with accurate punctuation and transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “made up,” “segment,” “rate,” and “decreased,” and the activity labels generally make the topic understandable. However, the range is limited and several spelling errors make the writing less clear, such as “tome,” “propotion,” “acounted,” and “Ramxin.” Some expressions are also imprecise or unnatural: “Working still the propotion” does not clearly describe the largest share, and “started by 2%” is not a natural way to report a figure. Choose accurate terms and check spelling carefully. For example, use “accounted for” or “represented” when describing proportions, and “rose from 2% to 7%” for the commuting figure.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and more complex comparisons, but sentence control is inconsistent. Errors include subject–verb agreement in “The two pie chart give,” missing verbs in “Working still the propotion,” and faulty sentence boundaries where capitalised clauses are joined by commas, as in “It rose to 42% in the end,Ramxin at home…”. The final sentence is also incomplete, so the relationship between the figures is not expressed. These problems sometimes make the intended comparisons difficult to follow. Build shorter, complete sentences first, checking that each has a subject and verb, then add comparisons using controlled structures such as “while” or “whereas.”

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