Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The provided figures illustrates proportion of the day spent by working adults on various activities in specific country in 1958 and 2008.

overall, percentages of the spent by working adults working population in both figures.

in contrast, the highest day spent by adults are working in 1958 about 33% and in 2008 is about 42% followed by sleeping about 32% in 1998 furthermore, it fall upto 25% in 2008, however, there is increased in relaxing at home over the period in 1958 only 8% but it rose upto 13% in 2008.

however, there was decline in going out with friends or family in 1958 about 19% but in 2008 about decline upto 6%, meanwhile, playing sports remain unchanged about 7% in 1958 and in 2008, fut we can see in the figures there is increased in percentages of travelling to work over the period in 1958 is about 2% but it rose upto 7% in 2008.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant comparisons, including the rise in working time from 33% to 42%, the fall in sleeping from 32% to 25%, and the decline in socialising from 19% to 6%. However, the overview is unclear: “overall, percentages of the spent by working adults working population in both figures” does not summarise the main pattern. There is also a factual error in saying sports “remain unchanged about 7% in 1958 and in 2008”; the chart shows sports only in 2008, at 7%. The reference to sleeping in “1998” is also inaccurate. To strengthen the response, give a clear overview of the major shifts and report the categories and dates precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response includes relevant details, but its organisation does not yet create a clear progression. The opening is followed by an incomplete overview, then a long paragraph that moves between categories with repeated “however,” “in contrast,” and “meanwhile.” These connectors sometimes suggest relationships that are not clear, and the final sentence is difficult to follow. Separate the response into a brief introduction, a clear overview, and logically grouped comparisons—for example, increases in work, travel and home relaxation, followed by decreases in sleep and socialising. Use linking words only where they accurately show the relationship between the figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, such as “proportion,” “decline,” “increased,” and “rose,” and the reader can identify most of the activities being compared. However, the range is limited and several phrases are awkward or imprecise, including “highest day spent,” “percentages of the spent,” and “decline upto 6%.” These choices make parts of the report harder to understand. Aim for standard chart language and accurate collocations, such as “the largest share of the day,” “the proportion spent on,” and “fell to 6%.” Also avoid repeating “about” when the chart gives exact percentages.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts longer sentences and uses comparison clauses, but these are often faulty, and frequent errors sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “The provided figures illustrates” has subject–verb disagreement, while “in 1958 is about 2% but it rose” has an incomplete grammatical pattern. The overview sentence is also not a complete, clear sentence. Use a wider mix of controlled simple and complex sentences, checking agreement, articles, and verb forms. For instance, write “The figures illustrate…” and “Travel time rose from 2% in 1958 to 7% in 2008.” Clear sentence boundaries and punctuation would also improve readability.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.