Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The pie chart describes that how adult spent their time in a specific country on a various activities in 1958 and 2008.

Overall, the sleeping and working were the main dominant activities over the period. Whilst the dramatic decrease occurred in going out with friend and family activity. The proportion of playing sport remain unchanged.

In 1958 relaxing at home , sleeping, and going out with friend and family respectively were the main higlighted activities . In 2008 the working activity rose to approximately half of the proportion. Sleeping activitie decreased steadily to 25%.While the major declined received by gathering with friend and family activity from 19% to 6%.

The remaining three activities in 1958 are the lowest activities as compare to other . Proportion of playing sport remaine same. However the figure of relaxing at home

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the broad contrast between work and sleep and note the sharp fall in time spent going out with friends and family. However, the report only partially covers the chart: it does not clearly compare all the main changes, and the overview claim that playing sport “remain unchanged” is unsupported because sport appears only in 2008. The final sentence is unfinished, leaving the comparison of relaxing at home incomplete. The response also contains 137 words, below the required 150, so the report has limited development. To improve, give a complete overview and select accurate figures for the largest increases and decreases, including the rise in working from 33% to 42% and the fall in sleeping from 32% to 25%.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure, moving from an introduction and overview to details, and some comparisons are easy to locate. However, progression is not consistently clear: the overview introduces sport as unchanged, then the body says the “remaining three” activities are the lowest without clearly identifying or comparing them. Linking is also awkward or incomplete, as in “Whilst the dramatic decrease occurred…” and “However the figure of relaxing at home,” which ends without completing the idea. Organise the details into clear comparisons between the two years, and use linking words only where the relationship is clear. A complete final sentence and clearer references to each activity would make the report easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary such as “proportion,” “decreased,” and “rose,” and the reader can generally understand which activities you mean. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, including “main dominant,” “main higlighted activities,” and “major declined received by.” Spelling errors such as “higlighted” and “remeine” also reduce precision. Some phrases, including “gathering with friend and family,” do not match the chart’s activity label naturally. Aim for concise, standard reporting language and use the chart categories consistently—for example, “the proportion spent going out with friends and family fell.” This would make your comparisons more precise and natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts a few complex structures, including “Whilst…” and “However…,” but sentence control is inconsistent and errors occur frequently. Examples include “describes that how adult spent,” “the proportion of playing sport remain unchanged,” and “Sleeping activitie decreased,” which show problems with clause structure, tense, agreement, and number. Punctuation and spacing are also unreliable, particularly around commas and the sentence beginning “While the major declined…”. The final clause, “However the figure of relaxing at home,” is incomplete and leaves the meaning unfinished. Practise accurate simple comparison sentences first, then add subordinate clauses; check subject–verb agreement, articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries during proofreading.

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