Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart provide information about the way adults spend their time in a specific country in the year 1958 and 2008.

Overall, at the begining of the period travelling to work was the lowest segment of their spending time and working was the most significant sector. In comparison,emd ofd the period ,working was still the highest contributed sector of their spending time ,and the lowest ammount of time was spending on going out with family or friends.

Working sector was 33% of spending time in the year 1958 and experienced a incerase to 42% in 2008 . Travelling to work accounted for 2% in 1958 and it increased more than threefold to 7% in 2008.Relaxing at home made up 8% of their spending time in the year 1958 and had a slight growth of 5% in 2008.

Sleeping,which comprised almost a quater of their spending time in 1958 and fell to 25% in 2008. Spending time on going out with family were at 19% in 1958 and it decrease by 13% after 50 years time period . In contrast, spending time on playing sports remain constant at the both year at 7%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main overall pattern: working takes the largest share in both years, while the smallest category shifts from commuting in 1958 to socialising in 2008. You also report several relevant figures and comparisons, including work rising from 33% to 42% and travel increasing from 2% to 7%. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear. Sleeping was 32% in 1958, not “almost a quarter”; sports is shown only in 2008, so it did not remain constant across both years. The statement that relaxing had “a slight growth of 5%” is ambiguous: it rose from 8% to 13%. A more precise overview and careful checking of each category would make the report more complete and reliable.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an overview followed by paragraphs comparing the categories, and the information is generally grouped sensibly. Comparisons such as work rising while sleep falls help the reader follow the main changes. However, progression is sometimes weakened by unclear or mechanical phrasing. The overview’s “In comparison” does not clearly signal the contrast, and the sentence about relaxing combines the starting figure and the increase in a confusing way. The final sentence also presents sports as constant without establishing that it appears only in 2008. Use clearer links between the two years and make each sentence express one comparison accurately; this would make the organisation more consistently easy to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “accounted for,” “comprised,” “increased,” and “fell,” and the reader can understand the general comparisons. However, several word choices and collocations are unnatural or imprecise, such as “spending time was,” “highest contributed sector,” and “experienced a increase.” There are also spelling errors, including “begining,” “incerase,” and “quater,” which reduce accuracy. Some phrases, such as “a slight growth of 5%,” do not clearly distinguish a percentage-point change from a percentage increase. Aim for precise chart language and check spelling and word forms; this will help you express the data more naturally and accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses beginning “which comprised” and comparisons using “while” or “in contrast.” Meaning is usually recoverable, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “The pie chart provide” has subject–verb disagreement, and “Sleeping, which comprised…” is a sentence fragment because the relative clause lacks a main clause. In “it decrease by 13%,” the verb form is incorrect, while “remain constant” also needs a past-tense form. Articles and sentence boundaries are sometimes missing or awkward, and punctuation spacing is inconsistent. Review agreement and past-tense forms, and ensure every sentence has a complete main clause while retaining your attempts at complex structures.

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