Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

"The pie chart illustrates different proprotions of the day spent by working adults on various activities.These were

two pie chart between 1958 and 2008.Initally,in 1958 Going out with freinds/family were 19%.Subsequently

travelling to work 2%.Then the percentage of sleeping in pie chart were 32%.The pie chart of adults of which spent

time on working were 33%.Finally,the relaxing at home were 8%.

On the other hand in 2008 some changes were present.The percentages of the day spent in Playing sports were

7%.And some other activities in this pie chart were shown of Going with freinds

and family were 6%,Travelling to work 7%.Sleeeping were 25%.

Relaxing at home were 13%.And working 42%.These were

the different percentages of the day which spent by working adults on different activities.These

changes were shown different percentages of the day spent by working day on different adults.

And these were the daily routine habits of different people.

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You report most of the chart figures accurately, including working at 33% and 42%, sleeping at 32% and 25%, and travel at 2% and 7%. This shows that you have identified relevant information from both years. However, the response mainly lists categories and figures rather than summarising the main features. It does not clearly highlight the key contrasts: working became the largest share in 2008, while going out with friends or family fell markedly, and sports appears only in 2008. The final comments about “daily routine habits” are vague and do not provide an overview. To develop the response, state the main overall changes first, then compare the most significant figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic chronological arrangement: it describes 1958 first and then moves to 2008. This gives the reader a simple framework, and words such as “Finally” and “On the other hand” signal some transitions. However, the information is presented as a sequence of disconnected statements, with frequent sentence fragments and abrupt line breaks. The repeated closing comments (“These were the different percentages…” and “these were the daily routine habits…”) do not advance the comparison, and “On the other hand” does not introduce a clear contrast. Group related figures and use a concise overview followed by organised comparisons; this would create clearer progression and reduce repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “percentage,” “activities,” “working,” “sleeping,” and “travelling to work,” so the basic subject is understandable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repetitive or imprecise, such as “different percentages of the day” and “some changes were present.” There are also spelling errors in “proprotions,” “freinds,” and “Sleeeping,” which reduce accuracy. Some wording is awkward, for example “the pie chart of adults of which spent time on working.” Aim for precise chart language and varied comparison terms, such as “accounted for,” “rose,” “declined,” and “share,” while checking spelling and natural collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response relies mostly on short, simple statements, with little evidence of varied sentence structures. Several sentences are incomplete or awkwardly formed, including “These were” and “The pie chart of adults of which spent time on working were 33%.” There are also problems with agreement and sentence construction in “Going out with friends/family were 19%,” while punctuation and spacing are inconsistent, particularly around sentence boundaries. These errors sometimes make the relationships between the figures and activities unclear. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, for example, “Working accounted for 33% of the day in 1958.” Then combine comparisons accurately using structures such as “whereas” or “compared with.”

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