Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-07-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 7.0)
The pie charts give information about the proportion of how working adults spent their day on different activities (Working, relaxing, sleeping, travelling to work, going out and sports) between 1985 and 2008.
Overall, adults have spent the majority of their time on working and sleeping in both the years, while reducing socialisation with friends and family. People spent more time relaxing at home as well as invested more time in sports.
The grown-ups indulged their time working more in 2008 (42%) as compared to 1959 (33%), while sleeping patterns among adults saw a decline of composition from 32% in 1958 to 25% in 2008. Time spent by relaxing at home also experienced a marginal rise from 8% in 1958 to 13% in 2008.
The working adults travelled more to work as the time spent saw an increase from 2% to 5% between 1958 and 2008. Hanging out with family or friends consistuted a smaller proportion in 2008 (6%) than 1958 (19%). Adults started to invest more time playing sports comprising of 7% in 2008.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
The response covers all key features of the pie charts, including the main trends and specific data points. You successfully identified the shift in working hours and the decline in sleep. However, there are some inaccuracies in the data reporting; for instance, you mention 1959 in the body paragraph, but the prompt specifies 1958. Additionally, the description of 'sports' as 7% in 2008 is accurate, but you missed noting that it was not present in the 1958 chart, which is a significant comparative feature. To reach a higher band, ensure all dates are cited correctly and that you explicitly highlight the most striking differences between the two years.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. The progression of ideas is generally easy to follow. You use some cohesive devices like 'while', 'as compared to', and 'in both the years', which help link ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the referencing could be smoother. For example, the final paragraph starts abruptly. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus will help improve the flow and cohesion of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'composition', and 'marginal rise'. However, there are some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'indulged their time working' and 'saw a decline of composition'. These phrases are not natural in an academic context. To improve, focus on using more precise verbs and collocations related to data interpretation, such as 'allocated time to' or 'experienced a downward trend'. Your spelling is accurate throughout, which is a positive aspect of your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'The pie charts give information about...' and 'The grown-ups indulged their time working more in 2008... as compared to 1959'. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical slips, such as 'in both the years' (should be 'in both years') and 'consituted' (spelling error). Additionally, some phrasing is slightly ungrammatical, such as 'Time spent by relaxing at home'. Increasing your control over complex structures and proofreading for minor prepositional and article errors will help you achieve a higher score.
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