Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-07-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 7.0)
The pie chart compare how working adults in a particular country allocated their time to different daily activities in 1958 and 2008
Overall, working and relaxing t home accounted for a larger proportion of the day in 2008,whereas sleeping and socialising with friends and family took up less time than in 1958
In 1958, adults spent the largest share of their day working (33%) ,followed closely by sleeping (32%) .Going out for with friends and In 1958, working adults spent the largest share of their time sleeping, at 32%. This was followed by working (20%) and going out with friends or family (19%). Relaxing at home accounted for 8% of their time, while travel to work and other interests or playing sports each made up 6%. Finally, only 2% of the day was spent on travel for reasons other than work.
By 2008, work had become the dominant activity, rising sharply to 42% of total time. Although sleeping remained an important activity, it fell to 25%. Time spent relaxing at home also decreased slightly to 13%, while socialising with friends or family dropped dramatically from 19% to 6%. Commuting increased from 2% to 8%, reflecting longer or more frequent journeys to work. In addition, the proportion of time spent using computers rose significantly to 8%, whereas this activity did not appear in 1958. Meanwhile, time devoted to sports and other interests declined modestly from 6% to 4%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 7.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
The response covers all key features of the pie charts and provides a clear overview. You successfully identified the main trends, such as the increase in working hours and the decline in socialising. However, there is a significant error in the third paragraph where you repeat and contradict yourself regarding the 1958 data (e.g., stating work was 33% then immediately saying 20%). This inconsistency impacts the clarity of the data reporting. Despite this, the overall summary is effective, and you have made relevant comparisons between the two years as required by the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
The essay is logically organised into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'In addition', 'Meanwhile', and 'Although' to link ideas effectively. However, the paragraphing is slightly marred by the repetition and confusion in the third paragraph, where the text restarts mid-sentence. This disrupts the flow of the response. Improving the transition between sentences and ensuring that data points are presented clearly without redundant restarts would help achieve a higher band score for coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 7.0
You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information clearly. Phrases like 'allocated their time', 'dominant activity', and 'declined modestly' are used appropriately. There are some minor issues with word choice and repetition, such as 'relaxing t home' (typo) and the slightly repetitive structure of the data descriptions. To improve, try to incorporate more varied synonyms for 'time spent' or 'proportion' to avoid repetitive phrasing. Overall, the vocabulary is adequate for the task and does not impede communication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as the use of 'whereas' and 'although' to contrast data. There are some grammatical errors, such as the missing 'a' in 'relaxing t home' and the fragmented sentence structure in the third paragraph ('Going out for with friends and In 1958...'). While these errors are noticeable, they do not prevent the reader from understanding the main points. Increasing the frequency of error-free complex sentences and proofreading for minor typos would improve your score in this criterion.
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