Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-07-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The pie chart illustrates the comparison between proportion of time spent by individual per day on 7 diverse activities( namely playing sport, working, relaxing at home, sleeping, travelling to work and going out with friends/ family) of the particular country, between 1958 and 2008.

Overall, it is evident that highest percentage of time citizen spent on working in both year, while least on travelling to work at commenced year and going out with friends and family in latter. Another noticeable change is travelling to work and relaxing at home were only increased after working.

In 1958, about one-forth of the daily time voter spent on working, similarly for sleeping at 32%. Then after, they utilize about 19% of their time on going out with their friend and family, while half of it time was spent on relaxing at home by 8%. Whereas, the minimal amount of time was spent on travelling to office accounted for 2 percentage of daily time.

In contrary, in 2008, the time invested in working per day increased and stood at 42% which remains still highest utilization of their day spent. Apparently, relaxing at home and travelling to work soared by 5 percentage. However, going out with friend and family dwindled sharply at 6%, same as sleeping declined by 7% and recorded at 25%. Furthermore, time took for playing sports consume 7% of daily time which was not mentioned in 1958 chart.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers all key features of the charts and makes relevant comparisons. You successfully identified the main trends, such as the increase in working hours and the shift in leisure activities. However, there are some inaccuracies in data reporting. For example, you state that 'one-forth' (one-fourth) of time was spent working in 1958, but the chart shows 33%. Additionally, the description of the 2008 data contains some confusion regarding the percentage changes. To reach a higher band, ensure that your data extraction is precise and that you clearly distinguish between the two years throughout the report.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. There is a clear progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices like 'In contrary' (though this is a collocation error) and 'Furthermore' to link ideas. However, the referencing is sometimes unclear, and the flow between sentences can feel a bit mechanical. To improve, work on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that your transitions between sentences are smoother to guide the reader through your analysis more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'utilization', and 'dwindled'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'at commenced year', 'half of it time', and 'time took for playing sports'. These errors occasionally distract the reader. To achieve a higher score, focus on using collocations correctly and refining your word choice to ensure it sounds more natural and precise in an academic context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is good. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with articles ('the highest percentage'), verb tense consistency, and preposition usage ('spent on working in both year'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the overall clarity of your writing. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles would significantly improve the accuracy of your sentences.

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