Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-07-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The given pie charts illustrates the comparison between how working adults in a particular country spent thrie time in 1958 and 2008. Units are measured in percentage.
Overall, in 1958 most of the time people are doing their work and only give less time for travelling for work whereas in 2008 the working hours of individuals increases at high level and there was only few time for going out with friends or family .
In detail , in 1958 the most of individuals was busy in doing there work which nearly about 33% and even there was much of time left for taking sleep which about 32% and only few time left for travel outside for work purpose which was only 2% whereas there was not much time for ralaxing at home iin that time there eass only 8%.
On the other hand, in the year 2008 the time was distributed by many activites for each person . Moreover the 42% work has been done in this year wheras the sleep activity is reduce compartively to 1958 which was only left 25% and relaxing activity was increased and was 13% with comparison with 1958 and going out with family or friends was reduce which was remained only 6% which was approximately 3 times less than 1958.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses the task by identifying the main features and comparing the two years. However, the analysis is somewhat inconsistent. For instance, you mention that 'going out with friends or family' decreased in 2008, but the data provided in the prompt (which I am treating as ground truth) shows that this category actually increased from 19% to 22%. Additionally, some descriptions are vague, such as 'most of individuals was busy in doing there work which nearly about 33%'. To improve, ensure your data extraction is precise and that you focus on the most significant trends rather than listing every percentage point, which can lead to a mechanical report.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'Overall', 'In detail', and 'On the other hand' to signal transitions. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence structures. The use of referencing is sometimes unclear, and the logical progression between sentences could be smoother. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that connects logically to the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to convey the basic meaning. However, there are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'thrie' instead of 'their', 'ralaxing' instead of 'relaxing', and 'eass' instead of 'was'. These errors occasionally distract the reader. You rely on simple descriptors like 'high level' or 'much of time'. To improve, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', or 'significant increase', and pay closer attention to spelling and word formation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('the pie charts illustrates', 'the most of individuals was busy') and incorrect verb tenses ('work has been done', 'sleep activity is reduce'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas. While these errors do not completely prevent communication, they are frequent enough to impact the overall clarity of your writing. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement will significantly improve your score.
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