Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-07-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The pie chart illustrates contribution of working grown ups in a certain nation spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Overall, people spent their most of time over their work , while very less time over the playing sports . Moreover, after their work hours they likely to spent more time over the sleeping.
To begin with, time spent behind their work is the highest in the both the year which is around 33% and 42% respectively. Followed by, time spent over sleep is 32% and 25% respectively. Moreover, in year 1958 people love to spent time over their hangout with friends and family which is shown by the percentage which is around 19%. while, this ratio decreased at 6% in the year 2008.
Furthermore, people of 2008 loves to spent more time on relaxing at their own house but 1958 has less ratio as compair to 2008 people. Additionally, both generation has less intrest in traveling for work. while, less time over the playing sports.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the pie charts, identifying the primary activities in 1958 and 2008. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For instance, while you mention the increase in work time and the decrease in social time, the comparisons lack precision. The phrase 'very less time' is imprecise, and the description of the data is occasionally confusing, such as stating 'time spent behind their work is the highest in the both the year'. To reach a higher band, ensure you clearly contrast the data points and provide a more comprehensive overview of the trends, rather than just listing percentages.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'Overall', 'To begin with', and 'Furthermore'. However, the flow is often interrupted by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. For example, 'Followed by, time spent over sleep is 32%...' is grammatically disjointed. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to track which year or activity is being compared. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one will significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic phrases like 'spent time over' and 'time spent behind'. There are also several word-choice errors, such as 'grown ups' instead of 'adults', 'hangout' used as a noun in this context, and 'compair' (spelling error). While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of range and the presence of errors in collocation and spelling prevent a higher score. To improve, try to incorporate more precise verbs and nouns related to data description, such as 'allocated', 'accounted for', or 'experienced a decline'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('people... loves to spent'), incorrect preposition usage ('time over the sleeping'), and article misuse ('in the both the year'). These errors are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader, though they do not completely impede communication. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that verbs are correctly conjugated and that prepositions are used accurately with time-related nouns.
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