Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-07-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The charts below shows the percentages of daily spending on working in various activities by 1958 to 2008. The pie chart demonstrates increasing to 2008.
Overall, in 1958 traveling to work had the smallest percentage only for 2%, which increase to 7% in 2008. Going out with friends or family was 19% in 1958, but still in 2008 dating with kinship was dropped to 6%, like in the sleeping part was dropped by 32% to 25%. Moreover, in pie chart has the parts which increase. For example, working part in 1958 was only 32%, in 2008 the working part was increase by 42%.
In conclusion, employed people in 1958 to 2008 was dropped and increase for some parts.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully develop the task. While you have identified some key features, such as the increase in working hours and the rise in travel time, the analysis is superficial. You have not provided a clear overview of the major trends, and some data points are presented in a confusing manner, such as the claim that 'dating with kinship' dropped. The response is too brief to adequately compare the two years, leading to a failure to address all parts of the task effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into three short paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is disjointed. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Overall' and 'Moreover', their usage is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as using 'Moreover' to introduce a point that contradicts the previous sentence's logic. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between 1958 and 2008. The lack of sufficient length prevents the development of a logical flow, resulting in a fragmented structure.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'part' and 'increase' throughout the text. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'dating with kinship' and 'spending on working in various activities', which are unnatural in this context. To improve, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'accounted for'. The current range is just enough to convey basic meaning but lacks the precision required for a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
There are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the clarity of your writing. For example, 'The charts below shows' (subject-verb agreement error) and 'the working part was increase by 42%' (incorrect verb form). You rely mostly on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences often contain errors, such as 'in 1958 traveling to work had the smallest percentage only for 2%, which increase to 7%'. Punctuation is generally functional, but the overall control of grammar is weak, with errors occurring in almost every sentence.
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