Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-07-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
The given pie chart illustrates that how the adults spend there whole day in late 1958 and now in 2008.
In 1958, people spend there most of the time in working which is 33% of there day after that they spend there most time in sleeping. They also give a part of there time to go out with there family and friends. For some time they also relax in there home which is almost 8% of there whole day. They spend 6% of there time for playing sports and at last they spend 2% in travelling.
On the other hand, in 2008 people spend a huge part of there day for working it is almost 42% of there whole day
and now in 2008 people do rest for a small time period which is 25% of there day, they have increased there time relaxing time at home than 1958 now it is 13%. on playing sports they spent 7% of there time in day going out with family and friends is reduced to much now it is 6% and spend 7%of there time on traveling for work
In conclusion, i acn say that in 2008 people increased there working time and they reduse there sleeping time and also they reduce spending time with family.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response covers the main features of the pie charts and makes relevant comparisons between 1958 and 2008. However, the reporting is somewhat mechanical, listing percentages rather than synthesizing the data into clear trends. While the key changes (such as the increase in working hours and the decrease in sleeping time) are identified, the overview is quite basic. To reach a higher band, you should focus on grouping the data more effectively—for example, contrasting activities that increased versus those that decreased—rather than listing each category sequentially. The conclusion is a good summary, but the overall analysis lacks the depth required for a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on simple transitions like 'In 1958' and 'On the other hand'. There is a lack of sophisticated linking words to connect ideas within sentences or between paragraphs. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear, and the flow between sentences feels a bit disjointed. Improving the variety of your cohesive devices and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus would significantly improve the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. You frequently use the same phrases, such as 'spend there time' and 'whole day'. There is little attempt to use more precise or academic vocabulary to describe trends (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'accounted for'). Furthermore, there are consistent spelling errors, most notably the confusion between 'there' and 'their', and 'reduse' instead of 'reduce'. To improve, you should aim to vary your word choices and ensure you are using the correct forms of words to convey your meaning accurately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response uses a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. The most prominent issue is the misuse of the possessive pronoun 'there' instead of 'their'. There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and tense consistency, such as 'people spend there most of the time' and 'they reduse there sleeping time'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several run-on sentences and missing commas. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to lower the score. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors would be beneficial.
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