Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-07-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given pie charts illustrate how the adults used to spend their day in the years 1958 and 2008.

Overall, the individual spend most of their time working while the least time travelling to work.

In 1958, adults used to spend about 33 percent of their time working, which eventually increased by 9 percent in 2008,similarly32 percent of time sleeping in 1958 but in 2008 it decreased to only 25 percent.the travelling time has also increased by 5 percent compared to 1958. And the playing sports remained same.

However, the individuals from 1958 used to spend about 19 percent of their time with their friends and family but it has drastically been limited to only six percent.

In conclusion, the working adults from 2008 are working more due to which they were unable to spend more time with their family or sleeping. `But they were more often relaxing at home .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the charts, identifying key trends such as the increase in working hours and the decrease in time spent with family. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For instance, the mention of 'relaxing at home' in the conclusion is not supported by the data provided in the prompt, which is a significant issue. Additionally, while comparisons are attempted, the report lacks a clear, analytical overview that synthesizes the data effectively. To improve, ensure that every claim made in the summary is directly supported by the provided visual information and focus on grouping data points logically rather than listing them sequentially.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the flow between sentences is often mechanical. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes awkward, such as the abrupt transition 'similarly32 percent' which lacks proper spacing and punctuation. The concluding paragraph introduces new information not present in the body, which disrupts the logical progression of the argument. To achieve a higher band, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'furthermore', 'consequently') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through the data comparison.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for a higher score. Phrases like 'drastically been limited' and 'remained same' are functional but basic. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'the individual spend' (should be plural 'individuals spend'). To improve, incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary related to trends and data, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'a significant decline'. Avoid repetitive phrasing and focus on using more precise terminology to describe the changes in the pie charts.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('the individual spend'), missing articles ('the travelling time'), and punctuation errors (e.g., '2008,similarly32'). The sentence structure is often repetitive, relying heavily on 'used to spend'. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct verb tenses and punctuation. Incorporating a wider range of complex structures, such as subordinate clauses, would also help demonstrate better grammatical control.

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