Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-07-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie charts illustrate the proportion of how late adulthood working in the specific state and utilize their time on various activities in 1958 up to 2008. Overall, it is clear that data in 1958 people spend more time in sleeping and working. However, in 2008 older adults more focused only on working.

In 1958, witnessed a significant increase in working (33%) and roughly in sleeping (32%). Recorded a sharp decline in elder people pass their time going out with friends and family (19%). Whereas, relaxing at home it decreased by only (9%). Travelling work, it rose by (5%).

In 2008, new activities are involved showed a marked improvement in working (42%). Relaxing at home a steadily increase by (13%). A new activity involved playing sports it went up by (7%). Underwent a substantial change in allocate time with peer and family group (6%). In 2008 the travelling rate rose by (7%). Relaxing at home also increase approximately, (13%) as compared to sleep pattern hit a low point by (25%).

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the task by identifying key trends in the pie charts. However, the analysis is inconsistent and contains inaccuracies. For example, the student claims 1958 witnessed a 'significant increase' in working, but the chart shows a static value for that year. Furthermore, the comparison between 1958 and 2008 is hindered by confusing phrasing, such as stating that 2008 saw 'new activities' when the data simply shows different proportions. The overview is present but lacks clarity, and some data points are misinterpreted or poorly described, which limits the overall effectiveness of the summary.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical flow is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. The use of cohesive devices is often repetitive or misused, such as starting sentences with 'In 1958, witnessed...' which lacks a clear subject. The progression of ideas is sometimes difficult to follow because the relationship between the data points and the years is not clearly articulated. While the paragraphing exists, the internal cohesion within paragraphs is weak, making the overall structure feel disjointed.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally limited and often imprecise. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'late adulthood working in the specific state' and 'hit a low point by (25%)'. The student attempts to use some descriptive language like 'substantial change' and 'marked improvement', but these are often applied to data that does not support such descriptions. The repetition of basic verbs and the misuse of terminology related to data reporting (e.g., 'new activities are involved') indicate a need for a wider range of precise, academic vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Many sentences are incomplete or lack a clear subject, such as 'Recorded a sharp decline in elder people...' and 'Travelling work, it rose by (5%)'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the placement of parentheses around percentages. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction and verb tense usage significantly impacts the clarity of the report.

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