Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-07-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The pie chart illustrate the time spent by working adults onn various activities in 1958 and 2008.

It is clear that adults spent their most of the time by working in 1958 and also same in 2008.And other activities are fluctuated in comparison of both of the year.

In 1958, as we say before, people spent their most time in working by 33%. Similarly in 2008 working activity had highest percentage by 42% than other activity.In second position in 1958 there was sleeping ,the percentage is about 32%.In addition sleeping was also had second place in 2008 by 25%.In the past like 1958 people are more interested in going out with family and frieds as the percentage was huge such as 19% .But in 2008 it decreasd a lot by just only 6%.

Then talikng about relaxing at home which was 8% in 1958 but in 2008 it increase manually by 13%.Playing sport is another activity to pass time, we can see this was like similar like in 1958 was 6% and in 2008 was 7%.And the last people pass their time by travelling tonwork which was vary rare in 1958 like 2% .On the other hand in 2008 it was icrease little by 7%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses the task by identifying the main features and comparing the two years. You successfully highlighted the primary trends, such as the increase in working time and the decrease in socialising. However, the response lacks a clear overview paragraph, which is essential for a Band 7 or higher. While you have included data, the analysis is somewhat mechanical, listing figures rather than synthesising the information into a cohesive summary. To improve, ensure you group related data points more effectively and provide a distinct summary of the most significant trends at the beginning.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat repetitive and basic (e.g., 'In 1958', 'In 2008', 'Then talking about'). There is a lack of sophisticated linking words to connect ideas between sentences and paragraphs. The progression of ideas is generally logical, but the flow is occasionally interrupted by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. Improving the variety of linking expressions would significantly enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the main points, such as 'fluctuated', 'decreased', and 'percentage'. However, there are several spelling errors (e.g., 'onn', 'frieds', 'talikng', 'icrease') and some awkward word choices, such as 'increase manually' and 'vary rare'. These errors occasionally distract the reader. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and ensure your spelling is accurate. Expanding your vocabulary to include more varied ways of describing trends—such as 'witnessed a significant rise' or 'remained relatively stable'—would be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('The pie chart illustrate', 'sleeping was also had'), incorrect preposition usage ('in comparison of'), and missing articles. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. You should focus on proofreading for basic errors like verb tense consistency and article usage. Practising more complex sentence structures, such as using relative clauses or participial phrases, will also help improve your range.

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