Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This pie charts illustrate the information of the young people and spending time on working with specific nation and time.

On the one hand, 1/3 of people spend their time on working in 1958 and it increased in 2008 . On the other hand , indiviual sleeping time reduced in 2008 as compared to 1958 as 25% and 32% respectively.

furthermore, travelling time is also sharply decreased in 2008 as 19% to 6% appro. as, other travelling time litte increased about 5% in 2008. moreover, relaxing time was also increased 5% in 2008 and playing sports almost same in both the time approx. 7%.

At the last, mostly activities increased in 2008 but sleeping time decreased in that time. so people mostly engageged in other activities instead of rest in modren time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While the student attempts to identify some trends, the analysis is superficial and lacks a clear overview of the main features. The data reporting is often inaccurate or confusing, such as the mention of '1/3' for working time, which does not align with the provided charts. Furthermore, the response misinterprets the subject matter, referring to 'young people' rather than 'working adults'. The lack of sufficient detail and the failure to reach the required length prevent a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into short paragraphs, but the flow of ideas is disjointed. While some cohesive devices like 'On the one hand' and 'furthermore' are used, they are often applied incorrectly or mechanically. The progression of information is not logical, and the final paragraph is particularly weak, failing to synthesize the information effectively. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between 1958 and 2008. Improved paragraph structure and more precise linking words are necessary to enhance the overall coherence of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'mostly activities' and 'modren time'. The student relies on basic descriptors and struggles to use precise terminology for describing trends (e.g., 'litte increased' instead of 'a slight increase'). There are also spelling errors like 'indiviual' and 'engageged'. To improve, the student should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to data analysis, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuation', 'significant', and 'marginal', and ensure correct spelling and word formation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'This pie charts illustrate'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward sentence structures. The range of grammatical structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. Complex structures are attempted but are often faulty, such as 'travelling time is also sharply decreased in 2008 as 19% to 6%'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around commas and periods. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors would be beneficial.

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