Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie charts illustrate the information about how an employers in specific country utilize their time in 1958 and 2008.
Overall, In earlier, they used to sleep most of their time and least they did travel to work. However, it changed and their working hour exceeded as well as the travelling to work too. Time spent by them on playing sports was remained same for both period of time.
In 1958, most of time(32%) the working adults used to sleep and less they did was travel to work(2%). In 2008, their time for sleeping routine was decline (25%)and working hour exceeded from 33% to 42%. However, the playing sports time was same of both 1958 and 2008.
In 1958, the adults spent 19% of their time by going outside with friends and family. Nevertheless, in 2008, it had completely change and declined to only 6%. They used to spend 8% of their time by relaxing at home in 1958. Later on in 2008, they expand it and spent 13% of time by relaxing at home.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response provides a general overview and identifies key trends, such as the increase in working hours and the decrease in time spent with friends. However, the report lacks precision in data reporting. For instance, the statement 'playing sports time was same' is inaccurate based on the provided charts, which show a clear change. Additionally, the overview is somewhat simplistic. To improve, ensure that all comparisons are factually accurate based on the data and provide a more comprehensive summary of the most significant changes rather than listing individual categories in isolation. The response covers the main features but lacks the analytical depth required for a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'In earlier' and 'Later on in 2008' are awkward and do not flow naturally. The transition between ideas is sometimes abrupt, and the referencing is occasionally unclear. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'in contrast', 'meanwhile') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through the comparison of the two years.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range expected at higher levels. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'an employers' (should be 'employees'), 'sleeping routine was decline' (should be 'declined'), and 'they expand it' (should be 'this figure increased'). These errors occasionally impede the flow of the text. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise verbs for describing trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'surpassed', and ensure correct word forms are used consistently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('playing sports time was remained'), incorrect tense usage ('it had completely change'), and missing articles or incorrect pluralisation ('an employers', 'travelling to work'). While these errors do not completely prevent the reader from understanding the message, they are frequent enough to distract. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically tense consistency when comparing past data, and proofreading for small errors like missing articles or incorrect verb forms.
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