Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The two pie charts compare the proportion of time spent by young adults across six types of tasks during the yearof 1958 and 2008.

Overall, working and sleeping remained extreamly popular through out the period while other activities showed a considerable change.

looking at the past details from 1958, it can be clearly observed that working amoung adults toped the chart approximately at 33% , followed by sleeping at the rate of around 32%. In contrast, childrens who went out with family and friends were roughly at 19 %. Whereas relxing and playing were at same level.

In comparison with the figure of year 2008, working and relaxing increased up siginificantly till the percentages of 42% and 13 %. Similarly, sport involvement and traveling for work showed a markable rie then before. On the other hand adult who slept and hang out with family represented a opposite trend decreasing to 25% and 6%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main features of the charts and makes relevant comparisons. However, there are significant inaccuracies in the data reporting. For instance, you mention 'childrens who went out with family and friends' in 1958, but the prompt refers to 'working adults'. Furthermore, you state that relaxing and playing were at the 'same level' in 1958, which is not supported by the data. While you identify the key trends, such as the increase in working hours, the misinterpretation of the subject matter and data points prevents a higher score. Ensure you carefully read the prompt and labels before drafting.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices such as 'In contrast', 'Similarly', and 'On the other hand' to link ideas. However, the progression of ideas is sometimes hindered by awkward phrasing and grammatical errors. The referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly when referring to the data categories. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that flows naturally from the previous one.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task, but there are several spelling errors ('extreamly', 'amoung', 'toped', 'siginificantly', 'rie') and word choice issues. Using 'childrens' instead of 'adults' is a significant error in context. You attempt to use some descriptive language like 'considerable change' and 'opposite trend', which is positive. However, the frequent spelling mistakes and imprecise terminology limit the clarity of your report. Focus on proofreading your work to catch basic spelling errors and ensure your vocabulary is contextually accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'during the yearof 1958', 'adult who slept... represented a opposite trend', and 'increased up siginificantly till the percentages of'. These errors, while not always impeding communication, are frequent enough to distract the reader. To reach a higher band, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct preposition usage, and ensuring that your complex sentences are constructed accurately without missing articles or incorrect verb forms.

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