Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The pie charts below show how working adults in a particular country spent their time in 1958 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

* Note: these aren’t the original diagrams given in the test, they were recreated for the purpose of demonstration.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The pie charts demonstrates that how youngers are working in a country by spending their time in a year of 1958 to 2008.

Overall, In 1958 and 2008 the working percentage was highest. While, the % of travelling to work was the lowest in 1958. Meanwhile, in 1958 Going out with family friends was the lessen. Wheres, doing rest at home % was rise to 13% from 8%.

Moreover, sleeping cycle was 32 % and 25% respectively high in both years. In addition, Hangout with favourites was diminish to 6% from 19%. However, the percentage of playing sports and traveling to work was quite similar 7%. Meanwhile, sleeping cycle was 8% and now 13% in 2008. In addition, traveling to work percent was 2% and 7% simultaneously. Additionally, adults spending their much time in working while, spent least time activity was Going out. In contrast, in 2008 adults working activities are rise incase of 1958.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to provide a clear or accurate overview. There are significant inaccuracies in the data reporting; for example, the text claims 'sleeping cycle was 32% and 25% respectively', which does not align with the provided charts. Furthermore, the comparison between 1958 and 2008 is confusing and often contradictory, such as the conflicting statements about the 'sleeping cycle' percentages. The response lacks a clear focus on the main trends, and the information is presented in a disjointed manner, making it difficult for the reader to identify the key features of the data.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices like 'Moreover', 'In addition', and 'Meanwhile' is often mechanical and sometimes inappropriate, as they do not always connect ideas logically. The referencing is frequently unclear, particularly when discussing the data points, which makes the flow of information confusing. The lack of clear transitions between the description of 1958 and 2008 results in a disjointed narrative that does not effectively guide the reader through the comparison of the two time periods.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The range of vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are several instances of awkward word choice and incorrect collocations, such as 'the lessen' (instead of 'the lowest'), 'Hangout with favourites was diminish' (instead of 'diminished'), and 'sleeping cycle'. The student struggles to use precise terminology to describe trends, relying on basic phrasing like 'was rise' or 'are rise'. These errors occasionally impede communication, as the reader must guess the intended meaning behind the incorrectly used terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('The pie charts demonstrates'), incorrect tense usage ('are rise'), and sentence structure ('The pie charts demonstrates that how youngers are working'). Complex sentence structures are attempted but are almost always faulty, leading to confusion. Simple sentences are also prone to errors in basic syntax. While the meaning is generally discernible, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and punctuation significantly limits the score.

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